Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In this neoteric world individuals are not taking enough bed time. There are many reasons behind this problem and it has some solutions too, which will be describe in upcoming paragraph.

First of all, lake of sleep leads many health issues. When individuals not taking enough sleep they face many health problems such as, dark circles, weakness and many more. Moreover, it will distract you from your aim or goal. Due to the lack of sleep human can not able to concentrate on their task during work schedule. Thus, they are not able to reach their goals. Therefore, this are the most common problems face by many people.

However, there are some possible solutions available which help to everyone. Avoid social activity at night. Nowadays, social media plays a crucial role in our life. So, whenever they get a time they used to do this kind of activity, specially at bed time and they spend lots of time on platforms like Instagram, Facebook, WhatsApp and all. Additionally, try to eat healthy food. In this modren era, people like to eat junk food or street food but if they take healthy meal it will assist their sleep cycle. A good food gives a good sleep according to the doctors. This is what they can be done about lack of sleep.

Although, lack of sleep leads health problems and people also not able to focus on their next days task. If individual try to avoid junk food and use of mobile phones at night time they can easily take enough sleep.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development of these ideas is limited. For instance, the problems mentioned (dark circles, weakness, lack of concentration) are listed rather than fully explained or supported with detailed examples. The solutions, such as avoiding social media and eating healthy food, are relevant but remain somewhat superficial. To achieve a higher band, you should expand on your points by explaining the 'why' and 'how' in greater detail, perhaps by discussing the long-term physiological or psychological impacts of sleep deprivation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'First of all', 'Moreover', 'However', and 'Additionally'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'This is what they can be done about lack of sleep'. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used in a more sophisticated manner would enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You use some basic terms like 'neoteric' (which is slightly misused here) and 'modren' (spelling error). There is also some repetition of simple words like 'problems' and 'sleep'. To improve, you should aim to use more precise collocations and a wider variety of vocabulary related to health and lifestyle. For example, instead of 'not taking enough sleep', you could use 'sleep deprivation' or 'insomnia'. Focus on using more academic and less conversational language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You frequently omit articles (e.g., 'lake of sleep leads many health issues') and have issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'this are the most common problems'). There are also errors in verb forms, such as 'human can not able to concentrate' and 'which will be describe'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly verb forms and article usage, will significantly improve your writing.

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