Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Many indiviuduals complaining about lack of sleep nowadays. In my opinion, increasing screentime causes constant eye straining and it leads to poor sleep performance.I believe proper diet and routine helps to regain sleep and improve overall health.
Firstly, People nowadays are more relying on smartphones and other digital equipments because of their work related or maintaining social connections.This will cause increase screen time which results in improper sleeping conditions.For instance, people work in information technology have long time of screen exposure and continuosly have eye contact with screen brightness which may lead to get difficulties in sleep.
Secondly,Improper diet and junk foods can affect body metabolism and may affect sleep of individuals.
some fast foods contains chemicals which may harmful to the body functions and sleeping quality.Poor sleep can develop from dehydration also.In addition, improper sleeping times can affect sleep quality. For instance, People works in night shift work changes their sleeping time in accordance with the work can cause routine change sometime and results in sleeping difficulties.
However,Sleeping difficulties can be improved by following a proper diet and hydration. Minimizing
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 181 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you identify relevant problems (eye strain, diet) and solutions (diet, hydration), the discussion is underdeveloped and lacks sufficient depth or specific examples to fully explore the prompt. The conclusion is also incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence. To improve, you must expand your arguments with more detailed explanations and ensure you provide a full, structured essay that addresses all parts of the prompt within the required length.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay uses basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'However' to signal transitions, which provides a logical structure. However, the paragraphing is inconsistent, and the flow is hindered by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the lack of development makes the progression of ideas feel mechanical. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph contains a fully developed main idea supported by clear evidence, leading to a cohesive and complete conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on somewhat repetitive phrasing, such as 'sleeping difficulties' and 'improper sleeping conditions'. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'digital equipments' (equipment is uncountable) and 'continuosly' (spelling error). To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to health and lifestyle, and pay closer attention to word forms and collocations to ensure your writing sounds more natural and sophisticated.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Many indiviuduals complaining' (missing auxiliary verb), 'People work in information technology have' (missing relative pronoun), and 'some fast foods contains' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing after periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence construction. Proofreading for these common errors will significantly enhance the accuracy and readability of your work.
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