Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is fact that many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. There are several reasons for such a situation. However, few productive suggestions can solve the situation. Both the aspects are explained in the ensuing paragraphs.

Nowadays an increasing number of people complain that they have problems getting enough sleeps because of the work stress. For instance, if a person works in a corporate environment, it has a stressful and busy work environment. Due to this reason, person should think about their after they return to home. As a result, the stressful work environment affect the sleep cycle. Additionally, the obesity is another reason for not getting proper sleep. For example, unhealthy eating habits are increase physical diseases such as high blood pressure, sugar. Therefore, the person is not feeling well and suffering with lack of sleep.

On the contrary, if more and more people follow a strict healthy diet, it would mitigate the most of the problem associated with body. For example, the person have a good health and also, follow the diet they never face this type of problems. Because after doing exercise and eating healthy our physical health will improve. Moreover, make your mind stronger and try to avoid overthink. Because of this reason most of your work or personal stress become negligible and you should enjoy your peaceful sleep.

To conclude, many people follows a unhealthy life style and taking more stress for their work or personal life cause such a problems. To avoid must have to follow healthy diet and avoid overthinking.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the mention of 'obesity' and 'high blood pressure' as reasons for sleep deprivation is slightly confusing, as these are often consequences rather than causes. The solutions provided, such as 'healthy diet' and 'avoid overthinking', are relevant but lack depth or specific examples of how these can be implemented in a modern, busy lifestyle. To improve, you should expand on your points with more logical connections and concrete explanations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression from problems to solutions. You use some cohesive devices like 'Additionally', 'On the contrary', and 'To conclude' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Both the aspects are explained in the ensuing paragraphs' in the introduction. Additionally, some sentences lack clear internal cohesion, making the flow feel a bit disjointed at times. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic. There are some issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'getting enough sleeps' (should be 'sleep'), 'increase physical diseases' (should be 'increase the risk of physical diseases'), and 'suffering with lack of sleep' (should be 'suffering from'). You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but the range is limited. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and a wider variety of academic vocabulary to express your ideas more fluently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('many people follows', 'the person have a good health') and article usage errors ('the obesity', 'a unhealthy life style'). While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading your work to correct subject-verb agreement and article usage, and try to incorporate more complex sentence structures with greater accuracy.

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