Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear Mr. Gorge,

I hope you’re doing well, I am writing to apologize for the noise from the party at my house last Sunday night.

I understand that loud music and large gathering may disturbed you and your family. Since we have a good relationship, I hope you will understand the situation and accept my sincerely sorry.

The party was held to celebrate my parents’ wedding anniversary. As Many of our relatives travelled from different cities, Celebration became far more energetic than we’d expected. Since we tried to finish early but party continued late into the night.

To ensure this problem doesn’t happen again, we will try to kept party indoor or in the hall. Moreover, for any incoming event , we will inform the neighbours in advance to reduce an inconvenience.

Hope you will consider my situation and accept my sincerely sorry.

Your sincerely,

Gurpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for an essay regarding the causes and solutions for sleep deprivation, but you have written a formal letter of apology to a neighbor regarding a noise complaint. Because you have failed to address the task requirements entirely, the score is severely impacted. Furthermore, the response is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which further limits your ability to develop any relevant ideas. To improve, you must carefully read the prompt and ensure your content directly answers the specific questions asked.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is structured with a clear salutation, body paragraphs, and a closing, which shows an understanding of letter-writing conventions. However, because the content is irrelevant to the task, the logical progression of ideas is not applicable to the prompt. Within the letter itself, the flow is generally clear, and you use basic cohesive devices like 'Since' and 'Moreover' to link your sentences. To improve, focus on ensuring that your paragraphing and transitions are used to support a well-developed argument that directly addresses the essay prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

You demonstrate a basic range of vocabulary suitable for a formal letter, such as 'apologize', 'inconvenience', and 'celebrate'. However, there are several errors in word form and collocation, such as 'accept my sincerely sorry' (should be 'sincere apologies') and 'may disturbed' (should be 'may have disturbed'). The vocabulary is generally repetitive and lacks the sophistication required for higher bands. To improve, work on using more precise collocations and ensure you are using the correct grammatical forms of words (e.g., adjectives vs. nouns).

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains several grammatical errors that affect the accuracy of your writing. Examples include 'we will try to kept' (should be 'keep'), 'As Many of our relatives' (unnecessary capitalization), and 'Your sincerely' (should be 'Yours sincerely'). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and the errors in verb tense and word form are frequent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of infinitives after modal verbs like 'will'.

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