Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays many people struggle in sleeping, which eventually impacts their life in a negative way. In this eassy we will discuss about how to fix it along with that do some changes in daily life routine.

Most of the people are not able to sleep because of avoiding healthy food, not maintaining their physic. This usually happens because of not eating healthy food this leads in lowering energy and more often feels lazy when it is time for exercise. For example, working more than regular hours and skipping home made meals makes you already tired. On top of that it influences them to order junk food which disturbes the whole immune system, and this leads in difficulties in getting sleep.

One effective way to break this chain, is by avoiding junk food and start doing exercise daily even though if it is just a simple drill. Although your doing exercise to keep yourself fit, try having some carbs and protiens which will kill the temptations of junk food. This usually keeps your energetic with less overwhelmed, Harmones are being balanced which leads to have a better mood. For example, waking up in the morning and little warmup exercise. Then having some protiens will keep you energetic until your work is done. Then having a snack like some carbs with fruits will fuel you up to continue your work. This type of routine will keep your immune system strong. As you know " Apple a day, keeps a Doctor away. And ofcourse do some stretching once you reach home which keeps your body relax and eventually you will end up sleeping.

In conclusion, lack of sleep impacts your daliy life, like not being physically fit and mentally tired. But this can be solved with small steps changing your daliy junk into healthy meals, daily some exercise like walking. All these would eventually makes you tired and you end up sleeping regularly on time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development is somewhat limited. While you mention that lack of sleep impacts life negatively and causes physical/mental fatigue, the discussion on the 'problems' is quite brief and focuses heavily on diet rather than a broader range of consequences. The solutions are practical, but the explanation of how they directly resolve sleep issues could be more detailed. To reach a higher band, ensure that you fully explore the implications of the problems mentioned and provide more nuanced, well-supported arguments for the solutions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'For example', 'On top of that', and 'In conclusion', to link ideas. However, the progression between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'This usually happens because of not eating healthy food this leads in...'). The flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects back to the prompt.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'immune system', 'protiens' (spelled incorrectly), and 'temptations'. However, there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'eassy', 'daliy', 'protiens', 'Harmones') and some awkward phrasing, such as 'avoiding healthy food, not maintaining their physic'. To improve, focus on using more precise vocabulary and ensuring correct spelling, as these errors occasionally distract the reader. Expanding your range to include more academic collocations would also be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('this leads in lowering', 'which disturbes', 'all these would eventually makes') and sentence construction ('even though if it is just a simple drill'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences. To achieve a higher score, you need to increase the frequency of error-free sentences and pay closer attention to basic grammatical rules, such as verb forms and pluralisation.

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