Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Sleeping is very important part of our life to relax our mind. But in these days they have difficulty to get enough sleep. There are many problems are responsible for it however it can be solve by taking some steps.

First of all, nowadays people like to spent their most of on mobile phone due to which people unable to get enough sleep. To explain it, when people are feel they like to spent their time on mobile phone by watching reels on instagram, videos on YouTube , movies and so on. They scroll their mobile phone until mid night and in the morning they have to get up early for their work due to which they cannot complete their sleep. Secondly, taking a lot of stress is also cause lack of sleep. To make it more clear, nowadays our life is fast growing due to which people have a lot of stress about their work, responsibilities and so on. Because this they always think about their these problems mostly at night time with this they cannot get good sleep.

However, there are also some solutions to solve this problem. Firstly, people manage their time make a proper time table. As, people should avoid to use their mobile phone after 9’o clock. By making time table they can easily manage their time and get good sleep. Beside this, people should share their problems with their family members. As if they start to share their with someone then they will feel less stressful and easily get good sleep.

In conclusion, although using a lot of mobile phone and taking stress are cause of lack of sleep. However, people can solve their problem by taking some steps.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development is somewhat limited. While you mention mobile phone usage and stress as problems, the explanation of the actual consequences (e.g., health issues, productivity loss) is thin. Similarly, the solutions are practical but could be expanded with more depth or specific examples. To reach a higher band, ensure that each idea is fully extended with clear reasoning and illustrative examples rather than just stating the problem and a brief solution.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices like 'First of all', 'Secondly', 'However', and 'In conclusion'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the connection between ideas is slightly disjointed, such as in the concluding paragraph where the sentence structure is fragmented. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'responsibilities' and 'stressful'. However, there is a reliance on simple, repetitive language (e.g., 'very important', 'good sleep', 'taking some steps'). There are also minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'people like to spent their most of on mobile phone' and 'they have to get up early for their work due to which they cannot complete their sleep'. Expanding your range to include more precise academic vocabulary would improve this score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('many problems are responsible', 'people are feel'), missing articles, and incorrect preposition usage. For example, 'Because this they always think' should be 'Because of this'. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of these errors limits the score. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage will help you achieve greater accuracy.

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