Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Nowadays a numerous people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. Where some problems with lack of sleep and some causes. Other side, there are some solution can be done about the lack of sleep. This essay will address both questions and provide my perspective on the matter.
The main reason why people can not get enough sleep because so many people are suffering from the stress, anxiety and some burden. For example, as a parent you need to pay for your child tuition fees, home mortgage and many more bills. As a result, the person who is suffering from these all conditions can not getting enough sleep due to tension. Therefore, a numerous people have difficulties getting sleep.
On the other hand, there are several solution can be done for this problem. Firstly, I firmly believed that have done about lack of sleep. For example, while people are suffering from some problems or challenging condition, they should do regularly yoga or meditation. As a result, if they are doing walk, yoga, meditation and some exercise, they can reduce some stress and anxiety. So, everybody should do regularly workout or meditation for calm mind and they would get better sleep.
To conclude, I believed that many people have difficulties getting enough sleep due to stress, anxiety and another tension but I suggested that everybody should go for walk, run, do some exercise or workout. Another thing for those people who have some challenges like pay bills, mortgage and other problems, they should do daily meditation for peace of mind.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The essay addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development is somewhat superficial. While you mention stress and anxiety as causes, you do not explicitly detail the 'problems' that lack of sleep causes (e.g., health issues, poor work performance), focusing instead on the causes of the sleep deprivation itself. The ideas are relevant but remain under-developed. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the consequences of sleep deprivation and the reasons why it occurs, providing more specific examples or explanations for each.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'On the other hand', and 'To conclude'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and there are instances where the logical progression is hindered by grammatical errors. For example, the transition in the second paragraph is slightly repetitive. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that referencing (e.g., 'these all conditions') is more precise and natural.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'anxiety', 'tuition fees', and 'meditation'. However, there is a lack of variety, and some word choices are imprecise or awkward, such as 'a numerous people' (should be 'numerous people') and 'challenging condition'. There is also some repetition of basic words like 'problems' and 'solutions'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and collocations related to health and lifestyle to demonstrate a broader range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'there are some solution can be done'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'can not getting enough sleep'), and missing articles. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors prevent the text from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that auxiliary verbs and verb tenses are used correctly in complex structures.
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