Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, people face a lot difficulties and unable to complete their sleep, as a result they become less productive, anxious, and irritated. Although there are many reasons for poor sleep, I will suggest some possible solutions to tackle the problem easily.

In this contemporary era, there are numerous compelling reasons people do not able to complete their sleep. Stress and competency can be considered as major reasons. High and constant pressure do not allow human mind to shut down completely as a result, constant thinking may not allow individual to complete their sleep cycle. For instance, in a workplace, where AI is replacing many human jobs, employees must be creative and think outside of the box. They face a lot of stress in their daily life and as a result their sleep may compromise.

Insufficient sleep make people to loose their concentration, make irritated and anxious, and it may also cause significant reduction in their productivity. According to a study, Human brain needs eight hours of deep sleep to work efficiently. In this mean hours our brain can relax and allow enough flow of oxygen to each cell membrane. For instance, if a person do not take enough sleep everyday, it might leads to Alzheimer.

People should do meditation or yoga which help them to reduce their stress and also enables them to work efficiently. As, many different yoga positions may allow to increase blood circulation in brain. Moreover, spending extra time with loved ones can has significant impact on human brain and reduce anxiety and stress.

To conclude, although stress can harm individuals in both physical and mental way, yoga and quality time with family can maintain hormonal balance and lead them to complete their sleep without such distractions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as mentioning productivity loss and the use of meditation. However, the development is somewhat limited. For instance, the link between AI in the workplace and sleep deprivation is a bit tenuous and could be more clearly explained. The suggestion of yoga and family time is relevant, but the explanation of how these specifically solve the problem of sleep deprivation remains somewhat superficial. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more detailed, logical explanations for your points rather than listing them briefly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, each with a central focus. There is a logical progression of ideas from the introduction to the body paragraphs and the conclusion. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'In this mean hours' or 'As, many different yoga positions'. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the transitions between sentences could be smoother to improve the overall flow. Referencing is generally clear, but some sentences feel slightly disconnected due to the limited range of linking words used.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'contemporary era', 'productivity', and 'hormonal balance'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'complete their sleep' (instead of 'get enough sleep'), 'loose their concentration' (should be 'lose'), and 'make irritated' (should be 'become irritated'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring you use the correct form of words in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('Insufficient sleep make people', 'a person do not take'), incorrect verb forms ('do not able to complete', 'can has significant impact'), and missing articles. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to keep the score in the 5.5 to 6.0 range. You should focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that modal verbs are followed by the correct base form of the verb.

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