Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

IN this modern era, masses face a lot of difficulty to sleep and there are complaining about it to the doctors, family and to other people. This have many reasons which people face lack of sleep which i will discuss in upcoming paragrph.

First and foremost, getting enough sleep is becoming major problem in many people life and it has various reasons like people are working night time and due to this changes in their sleeping time they are not getting proper sleep in the day time which is not neglect . For example, international students who are working at night and they return to their home in the morning time when they try to sleep but due to their working in night time they cannot change their sleeping habit in the morning time due to this they not get enough sleep. Secondly, people have alot of stress in this busy day where they have more burden in their mind due to this they get depress and cannot sleep proper. Lastly, my brother who also face this problem like he is getting depress because he is living alone in new country and he have difficulty to sleep enogh and sometime he try to sleep but due to depress he could not sleep.

To conclude, enough sleep is getting a major problem where alot of people face due to their night work, depression and living alone which cannot be neglect.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt—the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions—but the development is insufficient. While you mention stress and night work, you fail to explicitly detail the specific health or social 'problems' caused by sleep deprivation, and you do not provide any solutions, which is a major requirement of the task. Furthermore, the response is under the 250-word minimum, which limits your ability to fully develop your ideas. To improve, ensure you dedicate separate paragraphs to each part of the prompt and provide more depth for each point.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion, but the progression of ideas is weak. You use some cohesive devices like 'First and foremost' and 'Secondly', but the transitions between sentences are often repetitive or mechanical. The paragraphing is also problematic; the body paragraph is overly long and contains multiple ideas that are not clearly linked. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed main idea to help the reader follow your argument more easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'problem', 'sleep', and 'depress' (which should be 'depressed'). There is little attempt to use less common or more precise vocabulary. For example, instead of saying 'getting enough sleep is becoming major problem', you could use 'sleep deprivation is an escalating issue'. The word choice is often inaccurate, such as 'which is not neglect' instead of 'which should not be neglected'. Expanding your range of vocabulary and focusing on correct word forms will significantly improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('This have many reasons', 'he have difficulty'), incorrect verb forms ('cannot sleep proper'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with few attempts at complex sentences. When you do attempt more complex structures, they are often grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of adjectives versus adverbs (e.g., 'properly' instead of 'proper').

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