Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There are lots of reason for not getting proper sleep and sometime it can cause dieses and health isuue here i would like to discuss about it.

In this modern era people had very busy schedule of work and life rather than old generation.And it can cause stress which is very important reason of not getting good nap. also i research about it more and I found that nowadays children use lots of electronic item such as mobile phone, computer etc. Which also play vital role for them to not get proper bed time. because of that doctor found lots of health issues like eyes nervous system get low.

I think people not follow there routine which is the main reason and tension is more in nowaredays people about their life and future which take more stress and it can be generate sleeping isuues.

alternatively men's and women's have to spend some time to leisure center's or in park to overcome their stress. For children they have to allow proper time to use gadgets. People sometimes will have to take off on work and plan to holiday which can help to interact with family.most of people prefer to sleep in late night which is quite normal in this time but it is also important reason people is not get proper sleep. best time to sleep is between 8:00pm to 10:00pm and wake up on 05:00 am to 07:00 am.

everyday eight hours of good nap is important for healthier life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development of these ideas is limited. For example, you mention 'health issues' and 'nervous system' problems but do not elaborate on the long-term consequences or specific impacts. Similarly, the solutions provided, such as 'leisure centers' or 'taking off on work', are mentioned briefly without explaining how they effectively mitigate sleep deprivation. The response lacks a clear structure, such as an introduction or a formal conclusion, which makes the overall argument feel underdeveloped and somewhat disjointed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt to separate problems and solutions, the paragraphing is inconsistent and the flow between sentences is often abrupt. Cohesive devices are used sparingly and sometimes incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'and' or 'because of that' to start sentences. Referencing is also unclear at times, particularly in the second paragraph where the connection between 'electronic items' and 'nervous system' is not explicitly linked. A more formal structure with clear topic sentences for each paragraph would significantly improve the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'dieses' (diseases), 'isuue' (issue), 'nowaredays' (nowadays), and 'center's' (centers). You rely on basic vocabulary like 'good', 'important', and 'lots of', which restricts your ability to express complex ideas precisely. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more academic collocations and precise terminology related to health and lifestyle, rather than relying on informal or conversational phrasing. Expanding your range of synonyms and ensuring correct word forms will help improve your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'people is not get' and 'men's and women's have to'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization after periods. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'Which also play vital role for them to not get proper bed time.' To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses and pluralization, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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