Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Undoubtedly, these days humankind have controlled allot of things with the assistance of technology, yet many people have difficulties in getting enough sleep. This problem has various reasons, but there are ailments to get rid from this problem.

First and Foremost cause is people's unplanned schedule. Some individual does not make daily schedule and does all works as their mind wants. Like, do not eat meal on time and try to do more task in less time ( especially in office) and fails, then instead of sleeping focus on those tasks. Another major reason for this difficulty is over thinking. It is in a human nature about thinking about one thing again and again, so it is hard to control. Therefore, when people is failed to achieved what they wished then this circle begins. Taking The Tribune's 2024 report as an example, approximately 70% Indian youngster are affected from overthinking because they are worried from their examination, about government job and if they are failed to get these what society will think about them. And further this situation turn into depression even suicide as well.

Turing towards solutions, this problem can be tackled with with several ways. Firstly, people should plan their daily schedule and do task accordingly. This method not only plan their day, but also it will give them flexibility to complete other task in less time. Namely for cooking or other easy tasks. Secondly, before sleeping people should read books or novels according to their interest as this habit can get rid from overthinking and assists for good sleep. Even, University of British Columbia's report claims people are more likely to get sleep if they they did reading.

To sum up, it is concluded that bad schedule and overthinks are main causes for individuals, who are not having enough sleep. But, if they fix their schedule and can do reading before sleeping then they can complete their sleep.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as the impact of poor scheduling and overthinking, and the solutions provided, like time management and reading, are logical. However, the development is somewhat limited. The explanation of the consequences of sleep deprivation is brief, focusing more on the causes. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the specific health or professional consequences of sleep loss rather than just mentioning depression. The position is clear throughout, and the response is well-focused on the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. You use some cohesive devices such as 'First and Foremost', 'Another major reason', and 'Turing towards solutions' (likely meant 'Turning'). However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward. Referencing is generally clear, but there are instances where the flow is interrupted by grammatical errors, such as 'This method not only plan their day, but also it will give them flexibility'. Improving the variety and naturalness of your linking words would enhance the overall progression of your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your ideas clearly. You attempt some less common items like 'ailments' (though used incorrectly here, as it means illnesses rather than solutions) and 'flexibility'. There are several word-choice errors, such as 'ailments to get rid from this problem' and 'overthinks' used as a noun. Spelling is generally accurate, but the range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic descriptors. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring that words are used in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('Some individual does not', 'people is failed'), incorrect prepositions ('affected from', 'worried from'), and awkward phrasing ('if they they did reading'). While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and ensuring consistent use of articles and prepositions.

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