Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this modern era, Individual complain that they have ardous regarding getting enough sleep.There are certain proper regarding lack of sleep.In this fortcoming paragraphs I would like to shed light on the plausible solution of this before reaching to conclusion.
To Commence with, people did not concentration on their work properly and they do lot of mistakes in their work which leads to that, they are depressed all the time and they feel anxiety. And they put deterimemtal impact on their health. As as result, people do not get enough sleep baecause their mind is not refresh by having anxiety in their life.
Turning towarda solutions, people have to do physical excerise in their daily routine which refresh their mind. By doing some physical excersie workout people getting releif from anxiety ans stress. And they also avoid drinking during the ecvening. by drinking people do not get proper sleep. Secondly, people should have to avoid using cell phones before going to bed. Insted of using these devices, they should read book or listening to music before they going to sleep. Therefore, These things helpful for people to refresh their mind and they get a good sleep.
In conclusion, although, people have a stressfull life and anxiety. Because they have alot of work responsibilities in their life which leads to that, they do not concentrate on work properly. But by avoiding alcohol and doing some physical excercise helpful for people to refresh their mind and they get proper sleep in the niight time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development of these ideas is limited. The problems mentioned, such as poor concentration and anxiety, are stated but not fully explored or supported with detailed examples. Similarly, the solutions are listed in a somewhat repetitive manner. The introduction is slightly confusing due to vocabulary errors, such as using 'ardous' and 'proper' incorrectly, which makes the initial position unclear. To improve, you should aim to expand on your points by explaining the 'why' and 'how' behind your arguments, ensuring each paragraph provides a deeper analysis of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'In this fortcoming paragraphs' and 'Turning towarda solutions' are used to signal transitions, but the phrasing is unnatural. Additionally, the logical flow within paragraphs is sometimes hindered by repetitive sentence structures and unclear referencing. For instance, the conclusion repeats points already made without adding synthesis. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and there are frequent errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally impede communication. Words like 'ardous' (likely meant 'arduous' or 'difficulty'), 'deterimemtal', and 'excerise' are misspelled. Furthermore, the use of 'proper' in 'There are certain proper regarding lack of sleep' is incorrect, as it does not convey the intended meaning. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'anxiety', 'responsibilities', and 'alcohol', the overall control is weak. You should focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and practicing collocations to ensure your word choices are more precise and natural.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people did not concentration'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. For example, 'people should have to avoid' is redundant, and 'by drinking people do not get' is grammatically awkward. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar limits the score. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of modal verbs, before attempting more complex structures.
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