Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This Topic of Improper sleep management and the challenges individuals face in their health lives is a contentious issue. In today's hectic life, almost 70 percent of individuals face this issue. Here, I will discuss both the proper management of sleep as well as the problems they go through because of this.

To start with, there is a group of individuals who believe that 4-5 hours of sleep is enough to keep humans active and healthy for me which is not at all correct. As per a recent study at Oxford University, a human being needs 7-8 hours of sleep to keep their mind fresh and to have a sense of relaxation throughout the entire day. Now, to discuss improper sleep, I will start with the use of mobile phones in bed, which is one of the main reasons people stop falling asleep early. Using a mobile phone keeps your mind running. Moreover, other reasons for not falling asleep quickly can be a hard mattress, a poor diet, and too much alcohol.

Furthermore, not doing any activities, For Instance, not getting tired or just sitting at home, leads to not consuming enough energy to fall asleep.

Moving to the next part of the issue: difficulties faced by people due to improper sleep. Firstly, not having proper sleep leads to many diseases such as obesity, diabetes, headaches, and sometimes migraines too.

Secondly, this also leads to a change in human nature; improper sleep tends to make a person irritable and often ends up having unnecessary arguments.

To conclude with some analysis, sleeping at the right time is also crucial. For instance, a recent study reveals that a person who sleeps at night tends to perform better than a person who sleep at day time. I'm of the opinion that a proper sleep schedule should be maintained to live a happy and healthy life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While you mention health issues like obesity and diabetes, the solutions section is less detailed, focusing primarily on the importance of a schedule rather than actionable strategies. The introduction is slightly confusing, as you state you will discuss 'proper management' but then focus heavily on causes of sleep deprivation. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with clear explanations and specific examples. Your position is clear, but the overall structure of the argument could be more balanced between the two required components.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of ideas from causes to consequences. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To start with', 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Firstly'. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive. The use of 'Moving to the next part of the issue' is a bit informal for an academic essay. Additionally, the paragraphing is generally effective, but the conclusion is slightly weak, as it introduces a new point about sleeping at night versus daytime rather than summarizing the main arguments presented in the body paragraphs. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'contentious issue', 'hectic life', and 'irritable'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'health lives' (should be 'health') and 'stop falling asleep' (should be 'have difficulty falling asleep'). You also rely on some basic phrasing. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic collocations and avoid informal phrasing like 'ends up having'. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, but it lacks the sophistication and flexibility required for higher band scores.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. For example, 'a person who sleep at day time' contains a subject-verb agreement error ('sleeps'). There are also issues with punctuation and capitalization, such as 'For Instance' appearing in the middle of a sentence with an unnecessary capital letter. While these errors do not impede communication, they are persistent. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, consistent verb tenses, and standardizing your use of punctuation to ensure your complex sentences are error-free.

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