Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

As in this modern era of technology and advancement in making life easier for people's

It has taken a lot of ,ones time to be get involved in this

Lack of sleeping is one thing that peoples are looking for

Because in this era everything is interconnected to eachother that if a person is looking for one topic he gets involved in to others and they almost forgot that their time to rest is costing it a lot

Some people's by their own personal choice get involved in technology

For instance technology earned them a lot and making their financial status up to date that they almost ignore their time to rest.

Also social media is one common examples where you came in connection with different people's from other nationalities and to be socializing with them sleep and rest hours are ignored and it cost them a lot which is shown by deteriorating their physical and mental health.

To cope with this issue its mandatory to make a balanced schedule

That in regard with their activities there should be healthy activities to divert their thoughts from single option they are availing

It will help them out to be away from single choice and proper sleep will be part of their life

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay touches upon the causes of sleep deprivation (technology and social media) and suggests a solution (balanced schedule), the ideas are underdeveloped and lack depth. The response is too brief to fully explore the consequences of sleep deprivation, such as cognitive impairment or long-term health risks. The lack of sufficient supporting examples or detailed explanations means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with specific examples and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full discussion of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the paragraphing is ineffective, with several very short, fragmented sentences that do not flow logically. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often mechanical or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'that' or 'and'. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the sentences are often disconnected. To improve, you should use clear paragraph breaks for each main idea (causes and solutions) and employ a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in addition') to connect your sentences and ideas more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, often relying on basic or inaccurate phrasing. For example, 'making their financial status up to date' is an unnatural collocation, and 'peoples' is used incorrectly as a plural of 'people'. There is little attempt to use less common or academic vocabulary. Many phrases are vague, such as 'it cost them a lot', which does not clearly convey the specific negative impacts of sleep deprivation. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to health and technology, and avoid repeating the same words in close proximity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'peoples are looking'), incorrect word forms (e.g., 'lack of sleeping' instead of 'lack of sleep'), and sentence fragments that lack a main verb or clear subject. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some awkward attempts at complex ones. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.

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