Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this contemporary society, people are busy in their hustle and bustle life which create difficulties to get proper sleep. There are various reasons such as distraction and stress for this problem. However, a few remedies can be taken in order to tackle this issue. Both views will be elaborated in the upcoming paragraphs with relevant examples.

Examining the former side, in order to fulfill basic needs, people have to burn their midnight oil. Sometimes, individuals have to go out from their country, that cause homesickness. Furthermore, humans prefer remote work rather than labour work, that takes less energy and efforts. That is why, individuals body do not want enough sleep, as their body do not feel tired. Apart from this, people possess expensive habits and wishes, whenever, they try to sleep, always thinks that how to complete this and that which cause anxiety in their brain. According to one research, it has shown that 75% people, who belong to rich class, go to meditation camp, as of less sleep.

On the contrary, certain steps could be helpful for solving this problem. First of all, people should set boundaries as well as balance between their personal and professional life. Moreover, humans should try to satisfy themselves in that things which they already have. Also, its responsibility of community and company to organize awareness seminars, that will help people to get to know about side effects of less sleep. Additionally, people should start some exercise or workout to get enough sleep, because workout forces every part of body to come into action.

To conclude, it can be reiterated that despite having busy lifestyle, humans have to adapt good habits in order to stay healthy and get relaxed sleep.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat inconsistent. While you mention 'anxiety' and 'homesickness', these points are not fully explored or linked clearly to the consequences of sleep deprivation. The example regarding the 'rich class' and 'meditation camps' is slightly confusing and lacks a clear connection to the main argument. To improve, ensure that each point is supported by a clear explanation or a more relevant example that directly addresses the prompt's requirements for depth.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Apart from this', and 'On the contrary'. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly forced. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'humans should try to satisfy themselves in that things which they already have', where the connection to the previous argument is weak. Paragraphing is used appropriately, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using phrases like 'contemporary society', 'hustle and bustle', and 'burn the midnight oil'. However, there are several instances of awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'individuals body do not want enough sleep' instead of 'do not require' or 'need', and 'satisfy themselves in that things' instead of 'be satisfied with what they have'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your expression. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise academic collocations would help raise your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'life which create difficulties', 'individuals body do not want') and article usage. Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some run-on sentences and comma splices that affect the clarity of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on ensuring that your complex structures are error-free and pay closer attention to basic grammatical rules like pluralization and verb agreement.

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