Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this modern era, a number of human beings are suffering with insomnia or lack of the sleep. There are few reason behind this case such as the unbalanced lifestyle and the poor environment around person,but it can solved with improving daily routine and the expert's counseling.

Firstly, the one of main reasons behind poor sleep is individual's daily habits. To explain that nowadays people are stuck with poor diet and sleep patterns. For example, a large number people love drink coffee which contains caffeine, kind of substance can reduce sleepover. Consequently, excessive use of coffee may effect sleep quality and time span. Moreover, some time to work or family uncertain conditions a normal human can be responsible for suffering with mental pressure. For instance, employees have to work for strict deadlines.

overstress at job or family arguments can lead stress which may delay sleep hours.

However, to mitigate this issue there are few solutions. Improving daily routine is one of them. If a person can eat healthy diet, regular exercise and go to bed early, it can solve the problem to some extent. Apart from that, a few individuals, who have adverse case of insomnia, may consult to doctor and use medicine to improve sleep.

Furthermore, a small number of people who are struggling with overthinking, can to meditation which can help to relax their mind.

In conclusion, there are poor management of daily routine and poor environmental condition can create this situation, as it can solved with the help of balanced and healthy lifestyle and medical treatment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention 'mental pressure' and 'stress' as problems, these points are not fully extended with specific consequences (e.g., impact on physical health or productivity). Similarly, the solutions are listed rather than explained in depth. To reach a higher band, ensure that each main idea is supported by a clear explanation or a more detailed example. The position is clear, but the overall depth of the response remains at a basic level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Consequently', 'Moreover', and 'However' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as 'To explain that nowadays...' which does not flow naturally. Additionally, some sentences are disjointed, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You use basic terms like 'poor' and 'bad' repeatedly. There are also several collocation errors, such as 'suffering with insomnia' (should be 'suffering from') and 'consult to doctor' (should be 'consult a doctor'). While you attempt some topic-specific vocabulary like 'insomnia' and 'caffeine', the overall range is limited. To improve, focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary to express your ideas more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include missing articles ('the' sleep, 'a' large number people), incorrect verb forms ('can solved' instead of 'can be solved'), and subject-verb agreement errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for small grammatical slips will be beneficial.

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