Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Host of challenges are being confronted faced by the individuals in this modern times. One of them is people find hard getting required sleep without any exceptions. Numerous reasons can be held accountable behind this, which can be curbed by some appropriate measures, both are mentioned in upcoming paragraphs.

To embark with the reasons, why masses are unable to get enough sleep. The prominent one is Stress and anxiety. To explain, in these days, people are facing monotonous lifestyle and unable to spend time with themselves and their loved ones, which leads them to stress. If they depressed all times, humans cannot take sleep on time. Moreover, extra work is also a cause of lack of sleep because some people are money minded and they try to earn more money than others that is why people begin to do overtime jobs. Therefore, individuals become unable to getting enough sleeps.

However, there are some suitable solutions to tackle this issue. One of the best solution is relaxing health by doing meditation and exercise, which help to calm their body and mind from unnecessary stress and help to get good sleep. For instance, there were some camps started in 2014 in india for social meditation and exercises to adapt a healthy lifestyle, which results that 83% human beings who were unable to get sleep appropriately, they find these camps as a medicine. Therefore, people should do meditation on time, so that can be get feel free sleep.

In conclusion, sleeping is a serious cause which can effect people's overall health. Unless take potential steps, this issue is unable to root out. so, it needs to be taken instantly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development is somewhat superficial. While stress and overwork are mentioned as causes, the explanation lacks depth, and the consequences of sleep deprivation are not explicitly detailed beyond a general mention of 'overall health'. The solution provided is relevant, but the example regarding the 2014 camps in India is slightly vague and lacks a clear link to how it addresses the root causes of sleep deprivation. To reach a higher band, you should expand on the specific health or productivity consequences of sleep loss and provide more nuanced, logical solutions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'To embark with', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion'. However, some of these transitions are non-standard or awkward, such as 'To embark with the reasons', which sounds unnatural. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the referencing is occasionally weak, such as in the final paragraph where 'Unless take potential steps' lacks a clear subject. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'money minded', 'take sleep on time', and 'get feel free sleep'. These errors occasionally make the meaning slightly opaque. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'meditation' and 'lifestyle', the range is limited. To improve, focus on learning common collocations related to health and work, and avoid translating phrases directly from your native language, as this often leads to unnatural phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that persist throughout the text. Examples include 'Host of challenges are being confronted faced by the individuals', 'If they depressed all times', and 'One of the best solution'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors is high enough to distract the reader. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that articles are used correctly before nouns.

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