Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The number of people who are suffering from problem of not having enough sleep is increasing day by day. this issue could affect mental health of an individual for long term and create many problems. While there are multiple factors that would help reducing the problems.

To begin with, More and more people nowadays are facing difficulties getting enough sleep. I believe the reasons might be working for long hours, stressful work, lack of friends or family problems. Furthermore, lack of sleep can cause temporary or long-term mental health issues which could not only affect a person's financial but also social life. Not having enough sleep also increases the level of stress, anxiety and anger, which makes the person feel more tired. In addition, Individual could cause workplace hazards if he/she is feeling tired or stressful which could also cause an accident and results in a fatal injury. Moreover, it also changes person's behavior especially in parents, as the children might get influence by them and may act violently to others.

On the other hand, there are multiple things that could avoid such problems. Employers and the government could implement rules about fixed working hours for all the employees and provide benefits like time-off, sick leaves, and annual holiday benefits. Although some people are not taking stress, they spend a lot of time using technological gadgets like mobile, laptop, TV, etc. Using these devices for a long time could affect mental health. As a result, people find it more difficult to sleep peacefully. Moreover, people should do meditation or yoga at their home which could help reducing the overall stress. They should also spend more time with their friends and family which would give them more positivity and increase their productivity.

In conclusion, although Many people are taking stress and having difficulties sleeping which could affect their mental health, we can mitigate the problem by doing meditation and reducing screen time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the consequences of sleep deprivation and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as the impact on mental health and workplace safety, and the suggestions regarding working hours and lifestyle changes are practical. However, the development is somewhat uneven. For instance, the link between parental sleep deprivation and children's violent behavior is a bit of a leap and lacks sufficient explanation. While the position is clear, some points could be expanded with more specific examples or deeper analysis to reach a higher band. Overall, the response is well-focused on the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. The use of cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' helps guide the reader through the argument. However, there are instances where the flow is slightly mechanical or the referencing is a bit weak, such as the transition between the discussion of technology and the suggestion for meditation. Paragraphing is used appropriately, and the progression of ideas is generally clear, though the connection between sentences could be smoother in some areas.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the student to convey their ideas clearly. There is an attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'workplace hazards', 'fatal injury', and 'mitigate'. However, the range is somewhat limited, and there are occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'get influence by them' instead of 'be influenced by them' and 'taking stress' instead of 'experiencing stress'. While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles (e.g., 'the problem of not having enough sleep'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence fragments (e.g., 'While there are multiple factors that would help reducing the problems.'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some capitalization errors at the start of sentences. These errors are noticeable but rarely impede the reader's understanding of the main points.

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