Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now a day many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. This issue very dangerous for our life. Most probably they have health issues , mental problem , weight loss etc.. Now this time many person s have active in social media. They seen videos and another activitys. One of most issu that one.

Main issue is health problem , heart attack is main. Not sleep well in night our body part working in not better way. Heart beat less count that time our ecg way is very various stat. Mainly young generation is fase this issue. After come back to school the were complete study purpose. After that time they using mobil and lap top. See the video and another activitys.

Correct time not to sleep they were face another big issue that is mental problem. What is doing, what is taking they have no idea. They will be affected in there exam time and interview. No remember what will do. They are full mind out stage come forward. There parents are full confused for this stage how to mange. They think our children life how to going in future. Also come the issue body wait loss and dark shade in under the eyes. No remember any time.

To concluded this statment most probably using mobile and another device is limited time. Other way any urgent come no problem. Correct time eat and drink some time active in social media. Do exercise spent some time. Health is very well and life style beautiful and satisfied. Better sleep come in night time. Next day we will full fresh moments are give.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by sleep deprivation and potential solutions. However, the development is limited. While you mention health and mental issues, the explanations are fragmented and lack depth. For instance, the link between sleep and 'heart attack' is stated but not explained, and the solutions provided in the final paragraph are somewhat generic and lack clear structure. To improve, you should focus on developing each point with a clear example or a logical explanation rather than listing ideas. The ideas are relevant, but the overall response feels underdeveloped and lacks a clear, cohesive argument throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. Many sentences are short and lack logical connectors, making the flow feel mechanical. For example, the transition between the health issues and the impact on students is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used sparingly and sometimes incorrectly, such as 'One of most issu that one' or 'To concluded that statment'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') would significantly enhance the logical flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'full mind out stage' and 'body wait loss', which hinder clarity. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'social media' and 'mental problem', but the range is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. Spelling errors are also frequent (e.g., 'fase', 'mobil', 'mange'), which impacts the overall quality. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations related to health and lifestyle and ensure you are using words in their correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('many person s have active'), tense usage ('they were complete study'), and article usage. These errors are persistent and occasionally make it difficult to understand the intended meaning. While there is an attempt to use complex ideas, the lack of control over basic grammar prevents the use of more sophisticated structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and correct verb tenses, before attempting more complex sentence patterns.

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