Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Getting enough sleep is very essential parts of healthy life. Nowadays, Most of individuals complain that they face problem to fulfil the requirement of sleep for their body. There are many reason for lack of sleep such as un professional living style and development in technology also affect the sleep. I will elaborate my points in upcoming paragraphs.

Firstly, There are many people who have worst timetable for doing daily base work due to their work or lazyness. For example, A person working night shift as a security gaurd then he complete his shift in morning and came home they eat ready-to-eat food because they not have energy eighter

time to perpare healthy food for himself. that is the reason they only sleep five to six hours per day which affect their health after some time. additionaly, development in technology also cause the sleeping circle of person because of technology, most of the work done by automaticly or manage with the help of their smartphone For instance, if they have to buy grocery how they not have to go market they use different apps which purchase grocery and delivery to home. Although that minimize the physical activities of people from their daily works.

However, every proplem have solution. this proplem also have There are some way which can help. To begin with, people have to manage their time with proper schedule rather they do night shifts. such as they add fruits and vegetables after came from works which help to deal with hunger .Fruits and vegetables also give them good sources of energy to get enough sleep. Furthermore, they started avoid the use of technology or do some physical activities that beneficial for health if they tide then they get good sleep

To conclude, advancement in technology have great positive effect in our life, but until we use for particular time or purpose then we see positive semterns.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention night shifts and technology as causes, the explanation of the specific health consequences is brief. Similarly, the solutions provided, such as 'proper schedule' and 'physical activities', are somewhat generic and could be expanded with more specific examples or logical reasoning. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is fully extended with clear, logical support that directly answers the 'why' and 'how' of the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'However', and 'To conclude' to signal transitions. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions are abrupt or grammatically awkward, such as 'this proplem also have There are some way'. Additionally, the use of referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track the subject matter in certain sentences. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your main ideas. However, there is a lack of precision and some noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'un professional living style' instead of 'unhealthy lifestyle' or 'sleeping circle' instead of 'sleep cycle'. You also rely on basic vocabulary, and there are several spelling errors (e.g., 'gaurd', 'eighter', 'perpare', 'semterns'). To improve, focus on learning collocations related to health and lifestyle and proofread carefully to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence construction, such as 'Most of individuals complain' and 'they not have energy eighter time'. Punctuation is also problematic, with several run-on sentences and missing commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to distract the reader. To progress, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and ensuring consistent subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.

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