Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

As, in this modern era, people cannot get enough sleep because of fast going world. Due to this, they have to face alot of problems such as poor concentration, health problems, and so on but there also some solutions to solve these problems which i would be discussing in upcoming paragraphs.

First of all, Due to lack of sleep people loss their concentration on their study and work. To explain it, when people cannot complete their sleep then they unable to do concentration on their work because until they could not get enough sleep, they cannot fresh their mind and feel fresh then they cannot do anything. As, with stressful mind, people cannot do work properly and with this they loss their productivity in their work. Secondly, sometime people have to face health problems. Regularly getting too little sleep can negatively affect physical and mental health. It can lead to tiredness, low energy, and a weaker ability to cope with stress.

However, there are also some solutions to solve this problem. Initially, people should follow a regular sleep schedule. To make it more clear, people should make a timetable to go to bed and wake up at similar times every day. This can help create a better routine with this they can improve their sleep. Another solution is reduce screen time before bed. As, nowadays people like to use their phone , laptops during late night and then they have to get up early for their work due to which they cannot complete their sleep time. So, people should avoid to use phone at night time.

In conclusion, although lack of sleep creates health problems and poor concentration. However, it can be solved by taking some steps such as make a schedule of regular sleep and reducing screen time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, covering concentration issues, health impacts, and practical solutions like scheduling and reducing screen time. However, the development is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. For instance, the discussion on health problems is quite brief and could have been expanded with more specific examples or consequences. The position is clear throughout, but the overall development of ideas remains at a basic level, preventing it from reaching a higher band. To improve, ensure that each point is fully explored with more detailed explanations or illustrative examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the argument. There is a logical progression from the problems to the solutions. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'To explain it' or 'To make it more clear'. Additionally, some transitions are slightly awkward, such as the sentence structure in the conclusion where 'Although' and 'However' are used in a way that creates a fragmented sentence. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the flow and coherence of the writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There is a reliance on basic terms like 'problems', 'work', and 'good'. While the student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'productivity', 'regular sleep schedule'), there are instances of awkward phrasing and collocation errors, such as 'loss their concentration' (should be 'lose') and 'cannot fresh their mind'. The range is sufficient to communicate the main points, but the lack of sophisticated or less common lexical items limits the score. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise synonyms and collocations will help elevate your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people loss their concentration'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'cannot fresh their mind'). Some sentences are also run-on or poorly punctuated, such as the opening sentence which is a fragment. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors suggests a lack of control over more complex structures. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would lead to significant improvements.

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