Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, individuals are working for long hours in order to live luxrious lifestyle. As account of that, they usually spend very limited time for getting relaxed and sleep. The problems for lacking in sleep and the solution for good sleep and healthy sleep have been illustrated in the following paragraphs.

The first and foremost reason for lacking in sleep is unfixed daily routine. To explain, individuals nowadays, often working at more then one workplaces because they want to earn more money to live wealth lifestyle. So, most of the time they get awful schedule for works. Sometimes even they would not get time to relaxed themselves before going to another workplace. SO they have hectic schedule throughout day. Along with that, they may have different kind of stress either at workplace or at houses as well likewise, worrying about promotions, their children's education etc. Hence, these all perceptions would be prime suspect of lacking in their sleeps as they are not comfortable on bed because of their mental stress and physical tiredness.

As a solutions, individuals should manage their routine and do some meditations and exercise to maintain mental peace . To illustrate, people mostly focus for doing one high paying jobs instead of doing two or more with lower pays. Also, High-paid jobs often demand more mental works or professional works rather then labour works, which reduce hard physical work at workplace. Also, individuals should design their schedule in such a way that, they get time for relaxation or recreational activity as well with their familys and friends. Resulting in an increment of relations with their near ones, helps to reduce stress and tensions.

To conclude, though nowadays people working more then two jobs for better earnings and live wealth lifestyle which would lead to lack of sleep and relaxation time, they should make their routines logically includes time for relaxation, recreational activities and focusing on professional high-paid jobs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as the impact of hectic schedules and the suggestion of better time management. However, the development is somewhat limited. While the problems are identified, the specific consequences of sleep deprivation (e.g., health issues, cognitive decline) are not fully explored. The solutions are also quite general. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific examples or deeper analysis of the consequences and the practical implementation of your suggested solutions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs for problems and solutions, and a conclusion. There is a clear progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the repetitive use of 'Also' and 'To illustrate' at the start of sentences. Some transitions, like 'As account of that', are non-standard and slightly impede the flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally would enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'live luxrious lifestyle', 'awful schedule for works', and 'mental works'. Some phrases are repetitive, and the range of vocabulary is somewhat limited to basic terms. To improve, focus on learning more sophisticated collocations and topic-specific vocabulary related to health and lifestyle, and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'people working' instead of 'people are working'), incorrect preposition usage, and errors with articles (e.g., 'on bed'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While these errors do not completely prevent understanding, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.

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