Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In today's modern world, a lot of individuals getting problem with sufficient rest during the night. This may caused due to multiple responsibilities and busy in using electronic devices overnight. The every person can share work and avoid using devices.

In many urban cities around the world, people have multiple works during day and night to manage their family and status in the community, due to which they have sleeping problem. Ignoring the natural procedure of day and night in order to accomplish targets of life. The another cause of sleep is, the new generation are busy in day as well as in night, using electronic devices to update their profile on the social media like Facebook, Instagram etc., and scrolling the screen to look new trends in the market. Watching movies and web series because of these they are suffering from insufficient sleeping problems. For example, In India, most of the public are in front of screen till late night watching social media and films. Due to that, the recent studies shows that people are suffering sleeping issues.

According to the sleeping problem, people can manage their works by giving some responsibilities to family members in order to maintain the proper sleeping routine. This may help in enough sleep and proper focus on daily stu. The another solution is that, avoid using screen time, maintain a proper schedule of work and family time. Which will help in getting proper rest during the night and increase family bonding. For example, in Canada the families are quite concerned about life style and daily routine. They go to bed at around 9 pm and woke up early to reach workplace. During work use electronic devices, these practice keep them healthy and stable mind because of enough sleep.

Lastly, these days more people have issues with good sleep because of lots of work and taking care of family. The late night monitoring live channels and series is also one of the reason of sleeping problems. Individuals should ensure that, home task is assigned to family member. Individuals can also participate to avoid using phones and laptops during night in order to practice sleeping routine on time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive and lacks depth. For instance, the discussion on electronic devices is mentioned in multiple paragraphs without adding new insights. The examples provided, such as the mention of Canada and India, are relevant but remain superficial. To improve, you should focus on clearly articulating the consequences (e.g., health impacts, productivity loss) and providing more nuanced solutions beyond simply 'sharing work' or 'avoiding screens'. The position is clear, but the overall argument would benefit from more sophisticated analysis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow between and within paragraphs is often mechanical. You rely on basic cohesive devices like 'The another cause' or 'According to the sleeping problem', which are grammatically incorrect and awkward. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the transition between the causes and the solutions. While the paragraphing is present, the logical connection between sentences needs to be strengthened to ensure a smoother reading experience. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring they are used correctly would significantly improve the coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You use basic terms like 'sleeping problem' and 'electronic devices' repeatedly. There are also instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'getting problem with sufficient rest' instead of 'having difficulty getting sufficient rest' and 'stable mind' instead of 'mental stability'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to health, lifestyle, and time management, and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('This may caused', 'the new generation are busy'), article usage ('The another cause'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'Which will help in getting proper rest...' is a sentence fragment). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate. The majority of your sentences are simple or contain errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically verb tenses and the correct use of articles and prepositions, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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