Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent times most of the people are facing difficulties for routine sleep time and this can cause several problems in the human well-being and if they do not take proper step to cure at perfect time. This essay will discuss some problem associated with lack of sleep and propose some practical measure to solve in the ensuing paragraph.

To begin with, improper sleep is directly proportional to worst beginning of day. Additionally, person can not concentrate throught his task in the whole day and feels like low and frustating while working. To exemplify, sometimes if we don't get proper sleep, during next day at office you fell sleepy and cannot able to complete the task which you manager is relaying on you and this result in bad impression at work place as well as sometimes working on important project can lead to immedaite termination as well. Moreover, less sleep can feels more depressed in life and it invites more diseases to your well going life. For instance, New york time publish about the survey conducted by Parul University regarding sleep in this report they identified most patients visited psycologist are suffering from depression and anxiety and when they were asked about their past day to day life the most common reason is that due to more office hours, they do not get proper 7-8 hours of sleep.

However, if you make a timetable of a day and you follow that everyday you feel refereshing every morning and it also gives you positive vibe to do you daily activities. To explicate, Usually atheles follows daily timetable and becuase of that they get enough amount of sleep and starts every morning with fresh mindset, as keeping these all things in mind they represents the country and acheive their dream. Whereas, If you are working remotely for organization that works in different timesone always take nap during the break times, that also keep your mind in better state for the both timezones and you can not feels any dizeness while working at night.

Overall, it is clear that not having proper sleep can lead to various problems in life and at workplace as well, to overcome all these problem humans must need atleast 7-8 hours of sleep a day by taking various steps like preparing daily timetable and taking short nap.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. The ideas are relevant, such as workplace performance and mental health, and the solutions provided, like scheduling and napping, are practical. However, the development is somewhat uneven. The explanation of the problems is clearer than the solutions, which rely on anecdotal examples like athletes. While the position is clear, some points, such as the reference to 'New York time' and 'Parul University', lack sufficient integration or clarity. To reach a higher band, ensure that each idea is fully explored with more logical depth rather than relying on general examples.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, each with a clear focus. There is a basic attempt at using cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Additionally', and 'However'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the transition to the survey example feels abrupt. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'worst beginning of day' instead of 'a poor start to the day', and 'low and frustating' instead of 'lethargic and frustrated'. Some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'dizeness' (dizziness) and 'refereshing' (refreshing). While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary, the frequent spelling errors and imprecise collocations limit the score. To improve, focus on learning common collocations related to health and workplace productivity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('most of the people are', 'atheles follows'), incorrect verb forms ('cannot able to complete', 'can feels more depressed'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. A more careful review of sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors would be beneficial.

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