Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Currently, a plethorial of individuals think that they suffer from insomia and this have gone a long way to disturb their bodies mechanism. I believe that this has many factors which contribute to it, they are lack of rest, pressures from the place of work and others which lead to high blood pressure as well as mental inbalance. Solutions to these problems will be tacked in this essay.

First and foremost, many people complain of inadequate sleep in their lives most of the times and this has cause more harm than good in their lives. This insomia which is caused by thight shedule and pressure coming from the boss in different offices has cause stroke in some induviduals as a result of high blood pressure which can lead to death if proper medical care is not taken. For in, majority of the stroke patients in the different teaching and private hospitals

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, stopping abruptly at only 151 words. Furthermore, the essay trails off mid-sentence at the very end. While the writer attempts to address both parts of the prompt—identifying problems such as high blood pressure and stroke, and mentioning potential causes—the ideas are severely underdeveloped due to the premature ending. The introduction outlines an intention to discuss solutions, but the essay cuts off before any solutions can be presented. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a penalty under the length requirement and an overall score of Band 4.0 for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response demonstrates some attempt at organization by using a cohesive opener 'First and foremost'. However, the overall structure breaks down significantly due to the short length and the abrupt ending of the text mid-sentence. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with ideas crammed into a single block following the introduction. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'this has cause more harm than good in their lives. This insomia...'. Because information and ideas are not fully arranged coherently and the essay terminates prematurely, the coherence and cohesion fall into the Band 4 category.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used displays an attempt to incorporate less common items, such as 'plethorial', 'insomia', and 'mechanism'. However, these attempts are marred by severe spelling errors ('plethorial' instead of a plethora, 'insomia' for insomnia, 'thight' for tight, 'shedule' for schedule, 'induviduals' for individuals) and awkward word choices or collocations ('disturb their bodies mechanism'). While the writer has a basic vocabulary to convey some meaning, the persistent lexical errors and misspellings strain the reader and restrict the score to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, and the attempts at complex sentences are frequently marred by basic grammatical and agreement errors. For example, the student writes 'this have gone a long way', which contains a subject-verb agreement error ('this have' instead of 'this has'). Other errors include 'this has cause' (instead of 'caused') and 'mental inbalance'. Punctuation is also weak, and the fact that the essay ends abruptly mid-sentence prevents the demonstration of control over extended discourse. Due to frequent errors that distort meaning and limit grammatical flexibility, a Band 4.0 is appropriate.

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