Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is true that, thesedays a lot of people can face the difficulty to getting enough sleep and various problem effect the body for the lack of sleep. However, there are several factors and solution of this trend and the ideas will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with, there are more reasons of this statement. The first and the foremost reason is that, a numerous people use the mobile phones, tablets at late night abd the mobile phones and screen time also effect our health and eye because people brain active more time and do not rest in their free time and it is big as well as adverse effect to our sleep. Apart from this, people always prefer to their comfort and rest in their leisure time and do not paricipate in any physical activity and they become lazy and their body do not feel tide on the bedtime and sleeping disorders comes in their body

Nevertheless, there are some solutions of this phenomenon. Firstly, if people take part in the sports, physical activities like gym, walking, yoga and meditation, then their body feel relax and imrovevtheir sleeping disorders. Secondly, people spend less time on mobile phones, televisions, because it play a huge role in sleeping disorders. Moreover, people eat healthy food and follow the best diet and make their body fit and fine if body becomes strong, then all problems stay away from their body.

In conclusion, although there are some factors and method of this phenomenon, due to aforementioned paragraphs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the causes of sleep deprivation such as late-night screen time and lack of physical activity, as well as solutions like exercise, reduced screen time, and healthy eating. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on mobile phones and sleeping disorders lacks deep extension and relies on general statements rather than fully elaborated examples. The position is maintained throughout, and the scope of the task is covered, but ideas would benefit from greater elaboration and specific examples to reach a higher band. Overall, it satisfies the basic requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into paragraphs with basic introductory and concluding frameworks. However, the logical progression is hindered by awkward transitions and repetitive phrasing, such as 'sleeping disorders comes in their body' and 'due to aforementioned paragraphs,' which is an incomplete concluding clause. Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, and referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'this trend and the ideas'). Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow of ideas within paragraphs lacks seamless connection. Overall, the arrangement provides a basic structure, but cohesion and logical flow frequently falter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary such as 'physical activity,' 'meditation,' and 'sleeping disorders,' but errors in word formation, collocation, and choice are noticeable throughout the text. Examples include 'effect the body' (affect), 'tide' (tired), 'imrovevtheir' (improve their), and 'diet and make their body fit and fine.' Repetition of common words like 'body,' 'problems,' and 'people' restricts the lexical range. These lexical inaccuracies and limited control over less common vocabulary occasionally cause difficulty or require extra effort from the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic compound structures joined by 'and' or 'but.' Attempts at more complex structures frequently result in errors, such as 'a lot of people can face the difficulty to getting enough sleep' and 'a numerous people use the mobile phones.' Punctuation is faulty, particularly with unnecessary comma placements (e.g., 'It is true that, thesedays...'). Grammatical errors and awkward phrasing are frequent throughout the response, which can cause strain for the reader, although meaning is generally retrievable.

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