Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this contemporary society, individuals are suffering through hard time to complete their 8 hours of sleep. The lack of proper sleep could cause them health related issues such as insomnia or dementia. There are few things which people can follow to fix their sleep cycle.

To begin with, problems which they can face in long term. In long term, inproper sleep could cause them mental health issues. As per the specialist, a significant number of people suffering through stress and memory lose because they were unable to complete their 8 hours of sleep cycle. Moreover, workers who work longer hours in the offices and do not feel as per the required hours, their performance become weak at their work place. They cannot take appropriate action on at to overcome the challenges.

Furthermore, what could be done to fix their sleeping habits. They should prepare a strict time table for their daily routine. For example, a person work in the mornings. He needs to put fix hours at his job, so he could manage his social life as well and give appropriate hours to him sleep. Additionally, hire extra workers to complete the tasks, if a person does not have enough time. For instance, if someone has kids at home and he needs to work full time well. In this scenario, he needs to hire a nanny to take care for his kids all the time. Otherwise, person needs to work part time to complete the taks efficently.

In conclusion, in ths fast track society, people do not have enough time to complete their daily routine tasks. In this case, it is better to hire an additional employee to overover these all challenges and stick with a strick schedule where that individual could take care of this health as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, discussing the problems associated with a lack of sleep, such as insomnia, dementia, and reduced workplace performance, as well as solutions like strict timetables and hiring extra help. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive, placing the response firmly at Band 6. While the main points are relevant, sections like the discussion on hiring workers feel slightly tangential or underdeveloped in terms of directly solving a personal sleep deficit. To reach a higher band, the student should expand more deeply on the psychological and physical consequences of sleep deprivation with more precise examples, and ensure that the solutions directly correlate with improving sleep quality rather than just managing workload.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay demonstrates a clear overall arrangement and attempts to use paragraphing to separate ideas into an introduction, body paragraphs addressing problems and solutions, and a conclusion. However, logical progression is frequently hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions, such as 'To begin with, problems which they can face in long term.' Furthermore, referencing is sometimes unclear, as seen in sentences starting abruptly without clear subject anchors. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often inaccurate or lack smooth integration, resulting in choppy transitions between sentences. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion requires better linking to achieve a Band 7 score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical resource is minimally adequate for the task, showing attempts at less common vocabulary such as 'contemporary society', 'insomnia', and 'dementia'. However, there are numerous noticeable errors in word choice and form, including 'inproper sleep' instead of 'improper' or 'inadequate sleep', 'memory lose' instead of 'memory loss', and 'overover' in the conclusion. Collocations are occasionally unnatural, such as 'complete their 8 hours of sleep' rather than 'get eight hours of sleep'. These errors do not entirely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though attempts at complex structures are frequently marred by grammatical errors and incomplete clauses, such as 'workers who work longer hours in the offices and do not feel as per the required hours'. Frequent errors in prepositions, verb forms, and sentence fragments (e.g., 'Furthermore, what could be done to fix their sleeping habits' used as a full sentence instead of an indirect question) cause occasional difficulty for the reader. While basic meaning is usually conveyed, the high frequency of grammatical slips prevents the response from achieving a Band 6.

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