Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

These days alot of people find it difficult to get enough sleep. This can cause a range of both physical and health-related problems. This essay will explore this factors in detail and also profer solution.

To begin sleep deprivation can result to reduction in productivity and decreased cell function. Firstly, when one fails to sleep well, The person appears stressed, fatiguable and lacks concentration in carrying out simple tasks leading up to reduction in efficiency and productivity of work. Secondly, the human cells needs sleep to rebuild. With sleep deprivation, these cells overwork and do not get to regenerate resulting in many health issues like high blood pleasures, skin damage, kidney function impairment and so on. For example, when we sleep well, on waking up, we notice that the skin is plumped up and well refreshed, but when the cell is deprived of sleep the skin loses its elasticity and appears dull and unappealing.

Futhermore, relaxation and exercises can help people get enough and good quality

sleep that the body requires to repair and build up.

Good relaxation technique like yoga helps the mind meditate, relaxes the body, unwind the stress of the day, and promotes concentration. During this period, the body releases serotonin which further induces sleep. Again, incoperating good exercises like skipping, running, jumping and so on, increases blood flow to the heart and other vital organs of the body leading up to a better health and overall wellbeing.

In conclusion,sleep deprivation as reported by many people can cause reduction in functionality and degeneration of biological cells leading up to different health problems. Relaxation and exercises can help curb this menace and improve quality of sleep.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both parts of the task well, identifying both the problems caused by lack of sleep and potential solutions. The student explores physical and health-related issues, such as decreased productivity, cell function impairment, and high blood pressure, and offers relaxation techniques and exercise as solutions. Ideas are generally well supported with examples, such as the effect of sleep deprivation on skin elasticity. However, the introduction contains a typographical error ('this factors' instead of 'these factors') and an incomplete expression ('profer solution'). Overall, the task is adequately fulfilled, aligning closely with the Band 6 or 7 descriptors, though the development of ideas could be slightly more polished to secure a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a logical progression of ideas. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the introduction, problems, solutions, and conclusion. Cohesive devices are employed to guide the reader, with transition markers such as 'To begin', 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Futhermore' helping to structure the response. However, referencing and cohesion are occasionally mechanical or slightly faulty, as seen in minor awkwardness in transitions. Additionally, there are punctuation and spacing issues around commas and periods throughout the text, which detract slightly from the overall flow. Nevertheless, the progression of information remains clear.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'sleep deprivation', 'cell function impairment', 'serotonin', and 'overall wellbeing'. However, there are notable spelling and word-choice errors that prevent a higher score. For example, 'alot' is used instead of 'a lot', 'profer solution' should be 'proffer solutions', 'high blood pleasures' should be 'high blood pressure', and 'incoperating' is a misspelling of 'incorporating'. Despite these inaccuracies, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning without severely impeding communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over grammar with structures like 'when one fails to sleep well, the person appears stressed...' However, there are frequent grammatical errors and slips in agreement and spelling. For instance, 'human cells needs' contains a subject-verb agreement error, and 'result to' should be 'result in'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with missing or misplaced commas before conjunctions and after introductory phrases. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to restrict the score to Band 6.

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