Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays many people complain thet they have very difficulties to getting enough sleep. there a multiple factors and some of them are using mobile fone till late night is the main cause and fator of this diffculties and by watching movies late night and scrolling oon social medai has a great impact on sleeping pattren.

Unhealthy deit is also a main cause of this diffculties and most of the meal were order from outside while cooking in the home. Parents should need to improve the life style then the childern will adopt it.

Sleep is very important for health and daily 7 to 8 hour sleep is complusary for healthy life, if we didnot sleep well we will feel dizziness all the time at office and do not perfom well in our daily routine tasks. Getting enough sleep play a varius role, by enough sleep we will feel very active and work properly in our daily routine life.

Many people has a sleep problem they are taking sleeping pills and its also taking by youngster as well just becasue they have change their routine.

One of my friend also have a sleeping problem and he is on medication and but now he start excerise and in evening time he aviod to use social media which helps him alot.

Sleeping is very commonly factor of healthy life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt, identifying problems related to lack of sleep such as dizziness and poor performance, and suggesting solutions like reducing mobile phone usage and exercising. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the discussion on mobile phones and social media is fragmented across the text. Furthermore, the length requirement has not been met, as the response contains only 226 words, falling short of the 250-word minimum. This under-length naturally impacts the depth and extension of the ideas presented, resulting in a score of Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Paragraphing is poorly managed; the text lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, and body paragraphs blend different ideas without logical separation. For example, the second paragraph abruptly shifts from diet to lifestyle and parenting without smooth transitions. Cohesive devices are minimal, mechanical, and occasionally inaccurate, such as using 'and' repetitively to chain clauses together instead of constructing varied, structured sentences. The overall progression of ideas is hindered by abrupt shifts and a lack of clear referencing, leading to a score of Band 4.5.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'thet', 'fone', 'diffculties', 'medai', 'deit', 'childern', and 'excerise'. There are also frequent word-form and collocation errors, such as 'have very difficulties to getting', 'sleeping pattren', and 'most of the meal were order'. While the writer attempts some less common terms like 'lifestyle' and 'medication', the high density of basic lexical and spelling errors restricts the range and occasionally impedes comprehension, placing this aspect in Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical structure is heavily flawed, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple sentences or run-on sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions. There is a very limited range of accurate complex structures. Frequent errors include subject-verb agreement issues ('One of my friend also have'), tense inconsistencies, and incorrect prepositions ('in evening time'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and absent periods. These persistent, pervasive errors make it difficult for the reader at times, supporting a score of Band 4.0.

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