Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays many people are suffering from not getting enough sleep. Many people believe it as a serious disease. Many reason behind this, such as excess workload, stress, and too much use of electronic devices. This can be cure by proper diet, excercise and mental peace. We will discuss in detail the reason and solution in the ensuing paragraph.

Firstly, majority people are doing job and they have extra workload. They feel stressed all the time and stress cause of insufficient sleep. additionally people have more responsebilities in their life such as study, career, marriage and children so on. So, tension also can be the prime reason of lack of sleep. Moreover, In technological era use of electronic devices continuesly increasing among people. In a result, people are using there mobile and computers for playing games and chatting with friends until late night. For example, Many youngsters are using their mobiles in late nights that create problem of early age blur eyesights, depression, body feels lack of energy all the day time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify relevant causes, including workload, stress, family responsibilities and late-night device use, and you begin to illustrate the effects with an example about young people. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it explains possible causes, although the question asks what problems lack of sleep causes, and it does not develop practical solutions. The opening mentions diet, exercise and mental peace, but these are not explained or supported later. The example lists blurred eyesight, depression and low energy without clearly showing how sleep loss leads to each problem. The response is also 79 words below the required minimum, which limits the opportunity to develop both parts. To improve, cover effects and solutions explicitly, explain each idea, and add relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction is followed by a paragraph beginning “Firstly,” and ideas are grouped around possible causes. Linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “For example” also show an attempt to guide the reader. However, there is no clear overall progression through the two parts of the question: the body focuses on causes, while the promised discussion of solutions never follows. Some connections are mechanical or unclear, as in “In a result,” and repeated use of “So” makes the sequence feel list-like. The final example also combines several effects without explaining their relationship to the preceding point. Use separate paragraphs for problems and solutions, and connect each claim to its explanation or example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “workload,” “stressed,” “responsibilities,” “electronic devices” and “depression,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts awkward or unclear. For example, “Many reason behind this” and “early age blur eyesights” do not express the intended ideas naturally, while “continuesly” and “responsebilities” are misspelled. “Mental peace” is also vague in this context. Aim for accurate, natural phrases such as “several factors contribute to this problem,” “blurred vision” and “reduced concentration.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise collocations would make your ideas easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a sentence that links device use to late-night activities and an example introduced with “For example.” However, the range remains limited, and frequent errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles and verb forms sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “Many reason behind this” lacks a correctly formed subject and verb, while “stress cause of insufficient sleep” is missing a grammatical link. In “people have more responsebilities,” the article and plural construction also need attention; “stress cause” additionally requires subject–verb agreement. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and articles. More accurate control of these basic patterns will help you express longer ideas clearly.

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