Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

sleep is a serious and a growing problem in most societies. some people believe this problem increasing because work stress, lake of time to sleep and this is effect on physical and mental health. I will discuss both the point with appropriate example.

On the one hand, In preasent time people have work stress because they alwasy worrid about theri job. If they lose job so, how can they will survive life. In fact, they have big responsibility of their family. anxiety is play most significant role of lack sleep. While people have disease at that time also they not able to sleep well. For instance, If people habituated with bad habbits like tobeko or alcohol

On the other hand, people should do yoga everyday. eat more vegetables and fresh fruits. per day drink more water. creat some activiti like, dance, painting,reading, or paly physical game like, footbal, cricket, table tennis or then can play a mind game like, chess. that will more effective for their sleep. Even they should join gym or do ligh exercise at home, wallking in park but meditation is mre effective for the sleep because if they do meditation they reduce their stree lavel.

In conclusion, nowadays, people have more stress of their work load and anxetiy of future that is way they not able to sleep well. some time sick ness is the reason of lack sleeping but if they want to sleep well they should do yoga everyday, maintian dite, do not eat tobako and drink alcohol.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question: you identify anxiety, work pressure and illness as causes or related problems, and suggest yoga, exercise, meditation and dietary changes. The conclusion also restates your main view. However, the response only partly answers the first question, which asks what problems lack of sleep causes; most of that discussion explains why people cannot sleep rather than describing consequences such as reduced concentration, poor work performance or health effects. The solutions are listed but not explained in enough detail, and the example about tobacco and alcohol is left unfinished. Develop each main point with a clear explanation and a relevant example so the response addresses the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the phrases “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” signal a change of focus. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear: the first body paragraph discusses causes of sleeplessness, while the second gives a long list of remedies, without clearly separating the requested problems from their causes. Some links are mechanical, and the first paragraph ends abruptly after “tobeko or alcohol,” leaving the example incomplete. Group related ideas and use topic sentences to show how each paragraph answers a specific part of the question. Clearer links between claims and explanations would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “work stress,” “anxiety,” “physical and mental health,” “meditation” and “responsibility.” This gives the reader a basic understanding of your ideas. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or repeated, such as “lack sleep,” “sleep well” and “more effective for their sleep.” Spelling errors—including “preasent,” “worrid,” “habitts” and “anxetiy”—also make the writing less clear and reduce control of vocabulary. Aim for more precise topic language, such as “sleep deprivation,” “concentration” and “daily functioning,” and check spelling and natural word combinations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, for example, “If they lose job so, how can they will survive life,” and use linking clauses such as “because if they do meditation…” However, many sentences contain errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction, which sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “this problem increasing,” “anxiety is play” and “how can they will survive.” Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, particularly at the beginnings of sentences. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. For instance, write “If they lose their job, how will they support themselves?” and check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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