Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Undoubtedly, Health problems is a major issue among youngsters. Moreover, in this modern era, it is noticed that many individuals got problems to complete their sleep cycle. In my perspective, work overload is a major reason for this, there are also some steps that help to overcome time issue such as arrange time accordingly.

To commence with, the problems that affect our sleep cycle. The predominant one is work pressure. To elaborate it, due to enhancement in technology the work related issues arise because while, developing online platform it is rushed to online shopping. As a result, work related pressure increased among individuals and they got less time to spend with their families. For example, it is noticed that online working platform provides many job opportunities but also many work pressure with time guidelines. One other example is Zomato, this app provide work to many masses but it put pressure on workers to deliver food with in 10 minutes. Secondly, it is very common nowadays, every person work during day time and watch phones late at night. In conclusion they can't complete their sleep properly.

To overcome these issues person need to take some steps that will help them to complete their sleep. Firstly, they need to make a proper timetable for work and for family. As a result, spending time with family they get some refreshment and know about there family in an effective way, and also add some activities in their time table such as jogging, yoga and games that will help them to forgot about worries and improve their productivity that will help in solve their problems and in a good sleep. For instance, they plan trips with their loved ones to take time off from work.

To conclude, busy in work affect to their sleep cycle as they do not have time to spend with family but there are are some steps that need to be taken by masses to overcome tis issue such as make timetable for their daily routine.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question by identifying work pressure and late-night phone use as causes of poor sleep, then suggesting timetables, exercise and time with family. The examples of online work and food delivery help illustrate pressure, but the response focuses more on causes than on the problems lack of sleep can cause. The effects are only briefly implied through reduced family time and worries; explain direct consequences such as tiredness, poor concentration, or health risks. Your proposed solutions are relevant, although the link between family activities and improved sleep needs clearer explanation. The opening also shifts to health problems among youngsters, while the discussion concerns people more generally. Develop the effects and connect each solution explicitly to the sleep problem.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for causes and solutions, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. Sequencing words such as “To commence with,” “Secondly,” and “Firstly” signal stages in the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the explanation moves from technology to online shopping, job opportunities, and Zomato without clearly showing how each point relates to insufficient sleep. Some linking phrases are mechanical or do not express the intended relationship, as in “As a result, spending time with family…” The conclusion repeats the timetable idea rather than drawing together the main effects and remedies. Organise each paragraph around one clear point, then use explicit cause-and-effect links and clearer references to connect supporting examples.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “work pressure,” “sleep cycle,” “timetable,” “productivity,” and “time off from work.” These choices make the general subject clear. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated, particularly “work,” “pressure,” and “sleep cycle.” Some word combinations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “complete their sleep,” “work related issues arise,” and “forgot about worries.” There are also word-form and spelling problems, including “with in” and “tis,” which reduce accuracy and can make the reader pause. Aim for more precise expressions for sleep-related effects and solutions, and check collocations and spelling. For example, describe workers as facing “tight delivery deadlines” rather than saying the app “put pressure” on them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including cause-and-effect structures with “because,” “as a result,” and “that will help.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “Health problems is” has subject–verb disagreement, while “this app provide” and “every person work” also need agreement. Sentence boundaries are sometimes faulty: “In my perspective, work overload is a major reason for this, there are also some steps…” joins two independent clauses with a comma. Articles, pronouns, and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “know about there family.” Use shorter, complete sentences when explaining examples, then check agreement, tense, and punctuation before adding subordinate clauses.

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