Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recently many people that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. In my opinion, this is wright to complain our company and give some distance from job i think 8 hours work enough to people .

To began with, if people not take enough time to get sleeping then they are sick and we are not work in company. Less sleep makes people sick unhealthy fever symptoms mental illness physical problems so , company manager understand worker problems and few suggest and support .For example, if worker feel uncomfortable unhealthy sickness suffering from fever and they are not doing any work the company suffering losss.As a result, maybe employees well they company already well because employees sometimes dissurab to god in company. hence , you try to think your free time if any day many customers get in your company but there are no any employees then how to manage you your company therefore, try to understand every people problems and situation.

After that, How to do? What to do ? We should find effective solution to the problem into deprivation.on the other hand, we should getting enough sleeping everyday because enough sleeping makes strong active healthy maintain our physical anxiety so we are focusing enough time to sleeping and feel positive. For instance, if we are getting enough time sleep then our mind focus work and others responsibility.

In consequence, less sleeping people get sick unhealthy un active feel nervous mind not caught any words. enough time sleep people makes feel happy active enough time sleep pr

people day make goods.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You attempt to address both questions: you mention health effects such as “mental illness” and “physical problems,” and suggest getting enough sleep and having managers understand workers’ needs. However, the response only partially answers the task because the effects are listed rather than explained, and the proposed solutions are vague. The discussion also shifts toward company losses and employee absence, without clearly explaining how these outcomes result from sleep deprivation. Your position is difficult to identify in the opening, where “wright to complain our company” is unclear. To strengthen the response, explain a few specific consequences—such as reduced concentration or increased accident risk—and give practical measures, for example regular sleep routines or workplace adjustments, with relevant supporting examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: the response has an opening, a paragraph beginning “To began with” about problems, another beginning “After that” about solutions, and a concluding section. These divisions help the reader recognise the intended structure. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow, and several ideas are joined without clear relationships. For example, the discussion moves from illness to company losses, then to customers and managing a company. Linking phrases such as “As a result” and “on the other hand” are used, but do not always express the relationship accurately. The final paragraph repeats earlier points rather than drawing them together. Use one clear main idea per paragraph and connect each example directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary includes relevant topic words such as “sleeping,” “physical problems,” “mental illness,” “employees,” and “responsibility,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent inaccurate word choices or forms make some meanings hard to understand. Phrases such as “enough sleeping makes strong active healthy” and “mind not caught any words” do not communicate the intended ideas clearly. There are also spelling errors, including “wright,” “losss,” and “dissurab.” Build a more precise set of expressions for sleep and its effects, and check collocations and spelling. For instance, describe people as “alert” or “concentrated” rather than relying repeatedly on “active” and “healthy.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences using “if,” “because,” and “therefore,” but the range of sentence structures remains very limited, and errors are frequent enough to obscure meaning. Examples include “if people not take enough time” and “we are not work in company,” where verb forms and sentence construction are faulty. Subject–verb agreement and articles are also inconsistent, as in “company manager understand worker problems.” Some sentences run together, particularly the long passage beginning “hence,” so punctuation does not reliably show where ideas end. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause. Check that each sentence has a subject and correctly formed verb, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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