Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this hectic life style, people are not taking sufficient sleep and some of are think that they have difficuities if taking enough sleep. Plethora of factors can be added to address this essay, However, effective measures could be taken to mitigate this problem.

To begin with, working of many hours is the most primary reason why humans have lack of sleep. To illustrate, In this modern era, people have numerous resposibilities abou their family such as to educate their children, to full fill thier family's basic eminities. Hence, they have to work overtime everyday. As a result, they do not have enogh time for good sleep.

Additionally, mobile addiction can be another dominant cause behind this situation. Thesedays, people use the phone until late night and sleep around 3-4 am in the morning. Consequantly, due to alck of sleep dark circles occure on their face and face many health issues.

Many potential solutions will be carried out to solve this issue. First, people should find high wage job so they do not have to work overtime and can take a enough sleep. Moreover, their family members should also find some work which will be helpfull to cover their normal expences.

Furthermore, people should avoid of using cell phones overnight and take good enough sleep. because by doing this they will not only feel fresh but their health also will be in a great condition.

In concluse, although, many serious problems can be invited due to lack of sleep, effective actions can be taken.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question by identifying long working hours and late-night phone use as causes, then suggesting higher-paid work, shared family employment and avoiding phones at night. The response is relevant, but the problems caused by insufficient sleep are only briefly described: dark circles and unspecified “health issues” are mentioned without explaining their effects or giving an example. Some proposed solutions also need clearer reasoning; for instance, finding a higher-wage job may not be realistic or directly explain how working hours would fall. Develop each main point with a specific consequence or example, and explain how each solution would work. This would make the response more complete and its ideas better supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, separate paragraphs for causes and solutions, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “Additionally,” and “Furthermore” help readers follow the main points, and each paragraph has a recognisable focus. This already provides a coherent progression. However, some linking is mechanical, and connections between claims are not always fully explained. For example, the move from family responsibilities to overtime and then insufficient sleep is understandable but could be developed more smoothly. The final paragraph begins “In concluse” and repeats the general claim rather than drawing together the specific causes and remedies. Use transitions more selectively and make the relationship between each idea explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “overtime,” “mobile addiction,” “mitigate,” and “health issues,” and the main meaning is generally recoverable. However, noticeable spelling and word-choice problems reduce precision, as in “difficuities,” “resposibilities,” “eminities,” and “alck.” Several phrases are also unnatural or unclear: “the most primary reason,” “a enough sleep,” and “normal expences.” “Plethora of factors can be added to address this essay” does not express the intended idea naturally. Aim for accurate, conventional collocations rather than inserting formal-sounding words, and proofread spelling. More precise vocabulary for consequences, such as reduced concentration or impaired health, would also help develop the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some complex forms, including a reason clause (“why humans have lack of sleep”) and a result structure (“As a result, they do not have…”), alongside shorter sentences. However, attempts at longer constructions are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to read. Examples include “some of are think,” “people have lack of sleep,” and “their health also will be in a great condition.” Articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries also need attention: “take a enough sleep” is incorrect, and “because” begins a sentence after a full stop without a complete, well-integrated structure. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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