Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, many peolpe suffring with sleep depribvation beacuse of stress and work pressure. Getting good sleep is essential for maintaning good phsical and mental health.In my openion, lack of sleep can cause several problems but there are palthora of soltions we have to takle this problem.

There are several problems responsible for lack of sleep, Firstly, it can affect indivisible phsical health so, they feel tired throughout the day. Because of this they do not consentrate on their daily activies. Secondly, insufficent sleep negativaly affected on mental health, leading stress, anxity and mood swings. For instence, student who do not sleep properly cannot perform well on the examination.As well as, tired drivers may losse concentrate , as a result , it incresed road accident threat.

However ther are pulthora of ways to solve thois problem. Firstly, people should follow the sleeping schulde and try to go to bed at the same time. Secondly, they should avoid use of phone and other electronic devices before bedtime beacuse screentime disturb their sleep.In addiotion, doing some regular excercise and avoid caffeine in the evening help people to get better sleep. Employers should also provide reasnable hours so that employees get sufficent time to rest.

In concluion, a lack of sleep can lead to phsicaly and mentaly illness to takle this problem human should chane their lifestle with daily exe

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you identify physical and mental effects of insufficient sleep, and suggest routines, reduced screen use, exercise, less evening caffeine, and reasonable working hours. The examples about students’ exam performance and tired drivers make the effects relevant. However, some points are listed rather than explained—for example, the link between poor sleep and road accidents could be developed, and the proposed solutions could be connected more clearly to the problems. The conclusion is also incomplete, ending with “daily exe,” so it does not fully summarise your answer. The response is 24 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your ideas. Add a complete conclusion and extend one or two examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on problems, a paragraph on solutions, and an attempted conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “However,” and “In addition” help readers follow the main stages, and the ideas generally progress logically. This meets the lower-band expectations and shows some features of stronger organisation. To improve further, make the links between sentences more natural and avoid relying so heavily on formulaic transitions. For example, “As well as” does not connect smoothly to the preceding point, and the final sentence is cut off, disrupting the ending. Use clearer referencing and complete each paragraph’s final idea before moving on.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “sleep deprivation,” “mental health,” “mood swings,” “electronic devices,” and “caffeine.” These choices show an attempt to discuss the issue beyond very basic terms. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause, as in “peolpe,” “depribvation,” “indivisible” (apparently intended to mean “individuals’”), and “schulde.” Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “sleeping schedule” expressed as “sleeping schulde” and “road accident threat.” The range is therefore limited in accuracy and flexibility. Proofread spelling carefully, learn common collocations, and choose precise forms such as “concentration” rather than “concentrate” when a noun is needed.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including cause-and-effect structures such as “Because of this…” and “leading stress, anxiety and mood swings.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “insufficient sleep negatively affected on mental health” has an incorrect verb pattern and tense, while “doing some regular exercise and avoid caffeine … help” has problems with parallel structure and subject–verb agreement. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “student who do not sleep properly” and the run-together punctuation around “examination.As well as.” The unfinished final sentence further weakens accuracy. Practise complete sentence patterns, agreement, and punctuation, then check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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