Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He/She has asked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Joy,

I hope you are doing well. I writing in response to your letter. I really feel happy to know that you have not only completed secondary education but also achieve 96% grades. For further education I appreciate you decision of choosing Humber Polytechnic University and choosing same course which I have already done. This Cybersecurity course incudes a two year duration and each year have two semesters. The study covers the statistical analysis, operation systems,programming languages, basic algebra, the micro dynamics along with specialized classes to learn the use of AI(Artificial Intelligence) tools.

I particularly recommends this University as its faculity is highly reputive. The teachers are highly professionals and obtained several awards. They provide expousre to several workshops which give you hands on experience to work in real work. In addition to this, during last semester they provide special training to the selected students who then receive an opportunity to appear for Top Muntinational companies for interview.

Regarding the enrollement process, You can visit the official website and select this particularly course and then fill in required details.

For further querie

Yours lovingly,

Aashima

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion7.0
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you describe the two-year Cybersecurity course and its subjects, explain why you recommend the university, and give a basic application instruction. The details about workshops and interview preparation make the recommendation relevant. This meets the task well overall, but some parts are less fully developed than others. The course description is fairly specific, whereas the application advice only says to visit the website, select the course, and fill in details. Add practical guidance such as checking entry requirements, preparing transcripts, or submitting documents by the deadline. The unfinished phrase “For further querie” also leaves the letter’s closing thought incomplete, so a complete final sentence would make the response feel more fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear overall progression: an opening response to Joy, a paragraph about the course, a recommendation, and application advice. Paragraphing helps distinguish these purposes, and transitions such as “In addition to this” and “Regarding the enrollement process” guide the reader through the points. The sequence is easy to follow, supporting a strong level of organisation. To make the cohesion more flexible and polished, avoid relying on repeated “and” in the course list and connect related details more deliberately. The final “For further querie” is incomplete and interrupts the otherwise logical ending; finish the thought before the sign-off. A more natural closing sentence would also strengthen the letter’s flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of topic vocabulary, including “Cybersecurity,” “statistical analysis,” “programming languages,” “workshops,” and “hands on experience.” These choices communicate the course content and university benefits clearly, and you attempt some less common expressions. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision, such as “faculity,” “reputive,” “expousre,” “enrollement,” and “Muntinational.” Some collocations are also unnatural: “appear for … companies for interview” would be clearer as “attend interviews with multinational companies.” Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than more elaborate wording. Proofreading spelling and choosing conventional phrases will make your vocabulary more effective while preserving the useful subject-specific detail.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, including the sentence beginning “I really feel happy to know that…” and the explanation of training offered in the final semester. Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. For example, “I writing” needs “I am writing,” “you decision” needs a possessive form, and “each year have two semesters” requires subject–verb agreement. In “I particularly recommends,” the verb should agree with “I,” while “teachers … obtained” needs a suitable tense or auxiliary. There are also inconsistent capitalisation and punctuation choices, such as “You” after a comma and the missing space after “systems,”. Check verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence punctuation carefully.

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