Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He/She has asked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Krishna,

I hope this letter finds you in good health and high spirit. I am glad to hear that you are willing to pursue the same course which I have studied.

I took enrollment in Master of Business Administration with specialization in Human resource Management because I always wanted to become a HR manager at a multinational company.

After graduation, I was juggling to select one of the best universities for post-graduation and then I heard about a renowned university 'IK Gujral Punjab Technical University' from a friend. What I liked about this educational institue was its scholorship facility for students having 80% marks in graduation. This scheme has given educational opportunity to a number of students from disadvantaged backgrounds.

I believe it is a great idea to enroll for this course now as limited seats are avialable and last date to apply for this course is 30 November. You can visit their website to apply for this course by filling your details and in return you will get a confirmation email for booking your seat.

I hope this information will prove helpful and feel free to ask anything.

Best wishes,

Manpreet

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion7.0
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy6.0
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three requested points: you identify the MBA and its Human Resource Management specialisation, explain the university’s scholarship provision, and give application guidance, including the website and deadline. The friendly opening and closing also suit the audience. The recommendation is relevant, but its support is somewhat narrow: the scholarship is the only clear reason given for choosing the university, and the course itself is not described beyond its title and specialisation. The application advice is useful but could be more complete by mentioning documents to prepare or how to check eligibility. Develop these points with a little more specific detail so the advice feels fully supported and personal.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information is arranged in a clear sequence: you introduce the course, explain how you chose the university, give application advice, and close the letter. Paragraphing helps the reader distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “After graduation,” “then,” and “I hope” guide the progression. The overall organisation is easy to follow. Some connections are a little mechanical, however, particularly the move from the scholarship explanation to the recommendation to apply immediately. A clearer link explaining why the scholarship or university makes this course a good choice for Krishna would strengthen the flow. You could also connect the application steps more explicitly, rather than relying mainly on “and in return.”

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a personal advice letter, including relevant terms such as “specialization,” “scholarship facility,” “disadvantaged backgrounds,” and “confirmation email.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and the tone is generally appropriate. There are some inaccurate or unnatural word choices and spelling errors, including “took enrollment,” “educational institue,” “scholorship,” and “avialable.” “High spirit” is also not the natural expression in this greeting. These slips do not prevent understanding, but they reduce precision and polish. Aim for familiar, accurate collocations rather than more formal-sounding phrases when you are unsure of their usage.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The letter includes both straightforward sentences and more developed structures, such as the sentence explaining why you chose the university and the relative clause “students having 80% marks in graduation.” Most ideas remain clear, and the reader can follow the advice without difficulty. Some grammatical choices need closer control. For example, “I took enrollment in” uses an incorrect construction; “I enrolled in” would be more natural. In “I am glad to hear that you are willing to pursue the same course which I have studied,” the tense and relative-clause wording are awkward. Check articles and noun forms in phrases such as “a HR manager,” and use punctuation consistently around the university’s name. More accurate sentence patterns would improve clarity.

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