Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He/She has asked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter

• give details of the course you took at the university
• explain why you recommend the university
• give some advice about how to apply

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

You choose very good university. This university leads to the very higher salary jobs. The max. Package is $4, 00,000 dollar for a year . The write course that you study is IT, or business management. I recommend the university to you that your future should be bright. There is much more universities but this university is different than others. The staff of this university is very well educated and well disciplined. In this university 75-80 percent placements should be in one year. The professers in this university has 30 -30 years experienced and other are 15 year experienced. This university is located at the green and clean environment no pollution is there. They are not compromise with students health. If you apply online for this university than go to the university website and register your number , name or necessary equipments. And if offline than you go direct to the university.

Thanks

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover all parts of the prompt, mentioning details about the course, the university, and how to apply. However, the development of these ideas is limited and at times confusing. For instance, the student states 'The write course that you study is IT, or business management' and gives unrealistic statistics like 'The max. Package is $4,000,000 dollar for a year'. While all three bullet points from the prompt are addressed, the information is presented in a disjointed and overly simplistic manner without the appropriate tone expected in a friendly letter. This places the performance firmly at Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks proper paragraphing, presented as a single block of text (aside from the opening greeting). There is no clear overall progression of ideas, and sentences are simply listed one after another without effective cohesive devices. Words like 'And if offline than you go direct' show mechanical and inappropriate linking. Referencing is also weak, for example, using 'This university' repetitively at the beginning of multiple consecutive sentences. While the letter opens appropriately with 'Dear', the structural arrangement overall aligns with Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple words and phrases such as 'very good university', 'very higher salary', and 'green and clean environment'. There are several word choice and collocation errors, such as 'They are not compromise with students health' instead of 'they do not compromise student health' and 'necessary equipments' for application items. These errors occasionally strain the reader, reflecting a limited range that fits the Band 4 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent errors. Examples include 'The professers in this university has 30 -30 years experienced' (subject-verb agreement and word form errors) and 'If you apply online for this university than go to the university website' (incorrect use of conjunctions). Punctuation and spacing issues are also present, such as '$4, 00,000'. These persistent errors cause frequent difficulty for the reader and match the Band 4 descriptors.

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