Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is believed that in the following years, the most of individuals will prefer to go on vocations in their own nations instead of traveling another countries because it requires a lot of money to travel abroad, while I firmly disagree with this statement As growing trend of immigration. I will explain it thoroughly in next paragraphs.

To begin with, the majourity of people is ensured whether spending holidays in foreign country will drain a huge amount of finance, which they can save for future. Whereas if they spend their holidays discovering local places for example, historical monuments, local mesuems, and other places with natural beauty that is a good choice. Thus they do not need to travel number of hours.

However, it is fact of contemporary era that lots of people love to travel and imigrate in another states for good life style, money, global education and status. Fore instance, there are 50-65 percents of indians are residing in Canada , America, Europe, and Australia. Consequenctly such immigrants have great impact on those people who are living Indian. Thus, they also have wishes to travel abroad experience lavish life styles that their other imigrant bother- sister enjoying.

To conclusion, there is not doubt that although people enjoy travel locally, is still benefiting entire society. It is significantlly higher rate or abroad visitors. I recomend that takes it as a positively for societal status and environment growth.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a position—“I firmly disagree”—and give reasons related to the cost of holidays at home and the influence of people who have moved abroad. However, the response only partially addresses the question: it does not clearly explain why people in the future will continue choosing foreign holidays rather than holidays in their own country. The claim that 50–65 percent of Indians live in several regions is not clearly connected to holiday choices, and the conclusion’s reference to “environment growth” is not explained. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum. Develop one or two relevant reasons with specific, credible examples, and make sure each paragraph supports your stated position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “However” and “To conclusion” help show the intended structure. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the first body paragraph describes advantages of local holidays, while the next shifts to immigration without clearly linking it to the question of holiday destinations. Some connections are also unclear, as in “Thus, they also have wishes to travel abroad,” where the reference and reasoning are hard to track. The conclusion introduces ideas not established earlier. Build each paragraph around one clear reason, use linking phrases to show how evidence supports it, and ensure the conclusion follows from the discussion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “historical monuments,” “natural beauty,” “global education” and “lavish life styles.” These choices show an effort to discuss travel and migration beyond very basic terms. However, frequent spelling and word-choice problems make some phrases difficult to understand, such as “vocations” for holidays, “mesuems,” “imigrate,” and “bother-sister.” Several expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, including “drain a huge amount of finance” and “higher rate or abroad visitors.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “spend a large amount of money” and “overseas visitors”; these would make your meaning clearer without requiring more complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “Whereas” and a reason clause beginning “because.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries and verb forms frequently affect clarity. Examples include “the majority of people is ensured,” “in foreign country,” and “I firmly disagree with this statement As growing trend,” where the clause structure and punctuation are unclear. The final sentence, “I recomend that takes it as a positively,” also lacks a clear grammatical subject and verb pattern. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and articles. Use full stops to separate ideas rather than joining unrelated clauses.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.