Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent years, people like to travel a lot to gain different experience and broaden their horizon. It is true that people will choose to travel in their own nation rather than travelling to other countries on holiday. I strongly agree that people will travel to their own country to know the history and enhances economy of their own country.

To begin with, individuals who prefer to travel in own country to understand their culture and heritage in deeply. To ellaborate this point is more people wants to experience their ancient life-style and live in their rooted culture rather than experiencing foriegn culture. Additionally, travellers do not need to adjust in their habits such as environment, food habits, and language barriers. If they travel to other nations, they might feel discomfort rather than enjoying holiday. For example, citizens who travel to their own nation and they have any food restrcition, though they do not need take stress about what to eat and they can enjoy their holiday. Hence, it is important to have knowledge about their own culture and they find less difficulty, if they travel in their surronded area.

Besides this, travelling to own country is more cheaper option than travelling to abroad. Individuals who travel to abroad they need to pay taxes, expensive flights, foods and accomodation; however travlling to own nations is more cheaper as they do not need to pay extra money in money exchange and flights so they can save their money. Moreover, by travelling to own country boosts economy of local area as individuals get jobs in hotels, restaurants, and other places as a result it will increases country's own economy. A great example of this, people who live in the travelling places get jobs which will reduces unemployment rate and those people can earn lot of money. Therefore, due to high expense of travelling abroad people will choose to travel in their own country.

In conclusion, travelling to own country help people understand their culture and history which is why people will choose to travel their own country. Although some people like to explore foreign nations, it is more expensive so people can save their commute time and money by travelling into their own nations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you agree that people will increasingly holiday in their own country, and both body paragraphs give relevant reasons—cultural familiarity and lower costs, with a further point about local employment. The examples about food restrictions and jobs help connect these reasons to practical effects. This meets the task well, but the development is uneven: the cultural paragraph repeats the idea of understanding one’s heritage, while the economic benefit to local communities is asserted more than explained. The opening also refers to “enhances economy” without developing that point until later. To strengthen the response, explain more precisely why these trends will shape future choices, and extend each example with a clear link to your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, two reason-based body paragraphs and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “Besides this,” and “In conclusion” make the progression easy to follow. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and some links between sentences are unclear. For example, “To elaborate this point is more people wants…” does not form a clear connection to the preceding sentence, while “A great example of this” introduces an example whose relationship to the economic claim could be made more explicit. The conclusion restates the main reasons but adds “save their commute time,” which has not been established in the essay. Use clearer references and vary linking methods, while ensuring each concluding point follows from the body.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “culture and heritage,” “language barriers,” “accommodation,” “unemployment rate,” and “money exchange.” These choices allow you to discuss both cultural and financial reasons. However, the range is not always controlled: several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “in their rooted culture,” “travelling to abroad,” and “save their commute time.” Spelling errors—including “ellaborate,” “foriegn,” “restrcition,” and “surronded”—also reduce accuracy. Some wording is repetitive, particularly “travel in their own country” and “more cheaper.” Build a bank of accurate collocations for tourism and costs, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise phrasing would make your ideas easier to follow and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, using structures such as “If they travel to other nations…” and “Although some people like to explore foreign nations…”. This gives the response some variety, and the main message is generally understandable. However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction occur across the response. For example, “people wants” should use a plural verb, “travelling to own country help” needs a singular subject form, and “it will increases” has an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “To elaborate this point” is also structurally unclear, and several sentences join ideas without a clear grammatical relationship. Practise checking subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, and revise complex sentences to ensure each clause is complete and clearly connected.

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