Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that more people now is choosing to spend thier holiday in their own country than go travel abroad.

I agree with this statement because it would be a waste of money to travel far and would cause you to be far from your family. So I believe that people would choose to stay in their own country and spend their holidays there.

Spending holidays abroad is a bit of inconvenient as it would cause you a lot of pennies and it is somehow impractical. Though people prepared a lot for these vacation, many people are experiencing debt just to go and travel abroad. It becomes a huge problem after the vacation because they will be working hard just to pay off their debts. For evidence, people used credit cards for their plane tickets, hotels and food. Spending too much might drain them especially when it come to paying their cards, and debts.

Moreover, spending holiday abroad might not bring the whole family because of the tight budget. You will be celebrating it incompletely and you might feel sad. Holiday is an event that is particulary for the family. For example, Christmas and New Year. These are the times that they would really plan about it because this is the time were people have their chance to spend their weeks with their family.

Therefore, people choose to spend thier holidays in their own country because it is more convenient and going abroad is a bit expensive and impractical.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear from the introduction: you agree that people will increasingly holiday in their own country, and the conclusion returns to this view. Both reasons—cost and the difficulty of including the whole family—are relevant to the question. The credit-card example gives the financial point some support, while the references to Christmas and New Year illustrate the importance of family time. However, the discussion focuses mainly on why overseas travel can be difficult, rather than explaining directly why domestic holidays are an attractive future choice. The family argument is also less fully developed, and the claim that holidays are particularly for family is broad. Explain how local destinations offer enjoyable alternatives and develop the reasons with more specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction states your view, two body paragraphs present reasons, and a conclusion restates your position. Linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “Therefore” help signal the progression. Within the paragraphs, the financial explanation moves from expense to debt and repayment, which is generally logical. Some connections are less clear or mechanical, however. “For evidence” introduces an example rather than evidence, and the shift from overseas travel to Christmas and New Year needs a clearer explanation. The final paragraph largely repeats the introduction instead of drawing the two arguments together. Use more precise links between claims and examples, and make each paragraph’s central point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main ideas about travel costs, debt and family, including phrases such as “tight budget,” “credit cards” and “pay off their debts.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are noticeably inaccurate, which makes some sentences less natural. Examples include “a bit of inconvenient,” “a lot of pennies,” “prepared a lot for these vacation,” and “celebrating it incompletely.” Spelling errors such as “thier” and “particulary” also affect accuracy. Aim for more precise, natural expressions and check spelling carefully. For instance, describe overseas holidays as “expensive” or “costly,” and say that a family may be unable to travel together rather than that a celebration is incomplete.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause in “because it would be a waste of money” and a conditional structure in “if it comes to paying their cards.” The main ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur across the response. In the opening, “more people now is choosing” has a subject–verb agreement problem; “Though people prepared a lot” uses an unclear tense, and “when it come” does not agree with its subject. There are also issues with articles and sentence construction, as in “a bit of inconvenient.” Work on consistent verb forms, agreement, and complete, well-formed clauses. Proofreading each sentence for its subject and verb would improve control while preserving your attempts at complex structures.

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