Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I am agree with them

because festival and holiday are enjoy with family , friends and relatives .No one go on the travel its good because if we go anywhaere or any other country most of time we will spend in the travelling and also after travelling we will tired so not enjoy the holiday personally my experiance its not good on holiday spend in the travelling . We enjoy holiday own country because its eveything like ours we all know everything and everyplace and every people.we enjoy holiday with our family , family also happy and enjoy with us .

In my personal experiance last holiday I am gone abroad but its very difficut with me because lots of time i spent in the travelling and too long travelling my helath is not good when I was arrived my destination I am not feeling good and I was sick . after thatI was took rest 2 day so my holiday 2 days spoile in this sick condition and after that I was going outside to room and explore something and some place but eveywhere no one in our community and also languange also differt so I am very conffuesd and trubble to talk anyone and also difficulty about the some place because everything is new and I am alone in this place so its very difficult for me and also in other place our food are not available so I don 't like food there place and I was spent time only little dislike food and water .its not good and also my too much money spent in this travelling and enjouy no and also friends and family are not avilable there alone in the holiday its nit good thats why I am agree people enjoy holiday with there family in there own country .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you agree that people will prefer holidays in their own country, and you give relevant reasons, including travel fatigue, unfamiliar language and food, and the expense of going abroad. The account of your last holiday provides a personal example that supports your view. However, some points are more fully explained than others: the difficulties of your overseas trip are described in detail, while the claim that people enjoy domestic holidays because “we all know everything” is broad and not clearly explained. To strengthen the response, develop the reasons more evenly and connect them directly to why domestic travel may become more popular in the future, rather than focusing mainly on why one trip was unpleasant.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an identifiable overall direction: it states your opinion, gives general reasons, and then describes a personal experience before returning to your view. This helps the reader follow the main argument. However, the ideas are presented in two very long blocks, and the second paragraph contains many events and reasons without clear separation. Linking words such as “and also” and “after that” are repeated, while relationships between some points are not clearly signposted. Use separate paragraphs for your position, main reasons, and example, and organise the travel story in a clear sequence. More precise links such as “For example,” “As a result,” and “In contrast” would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “travelling,” “destination,” “language,” “explore,” and “money,” and the reader can generally understand your main meaning. However, the range is repetitive, with frequent reliance on “good,” “difficult,” “enjoy,” and “also.” Several word choices and spellings make parts of the account harder to understand, such as “my holiday 2 days spoile,” “conffuesd,” and “our food are not available.” Aim to use more precise travel-related expressions and check spelling and word forms. For instance, describing a trip as “exhausting” or saying that local food was “unfamiliar” would communicate your experience more clearly and naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, and the reader can usually identify the main events in your story. However, control of sentence structure and verb forms is limited, and errors often make the account difficult to read. Examples include “I am agree,” “last holiday I am gone abroad,” and “when I was arrived my destination”; these need more accurate forms such as “I agree,” “I went abroad,” and “when I arrived at my destination.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also often unclear, particularly in the long sequence beginning “after that I was took rest.” Practise accurate past-tense sentences and divide connected ideas into shorter, correctly punctuated sentences.

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