Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Holidays are important in all of life .Every one need to take rest for stay healthy. Coming days number of masses will choose to spend holiday own nation although going abroad.I strongley agree with the above mentioned statment for which vinidication it would be elaborated in the upcoming paragraphs.

To start with,there are accosiated the reasons it.For which first and foremost is,

individulas try to travel own country. For example people try to interduse own nation different culture . Additionaley indvidulas leve a neuqlery familys so they have no more days to leve or travel more days .

Further more masses try to envest money acording to finenational condetion so majorty of people travel our country in holidays. Individuals travel deffrint stat or some people traveling hestorycal plases.

On the other hand people go on holidays travel abrad .individuals try to interduce other country culture and some time they will go relatives for leve and traveling togather. fue masses pland to shift abroad than the go in holidays spend some time and try to know there envornment after that take finel disesion .

In conclusion afterm taking accosiated into my all considreasion to emphysize that majorties of people go on holidays travel in own country and some individuald go abroud in holidays .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position in the introduction—“I strongly agree”—and give relevant reasons, including domestic travel being more affordable and allowing people to experience their own country. You also acknowledge why some people travel abroad, so the response is connected to both sides of the topic. However, the reasons are only briefly stated and examples are vague; for instance, “people try to introduce own nation different culture” is not explained or illustrated. The conclusion repeats the general position without drawing the reasons together. The response is also 37 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop your ideas. Explain each reason with a specific example and fuller support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, paragraphs presenting reasons for domestic and overseas holidays, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “To start with,” “Furthermore,” and “On the other hand” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because ideas are compressed or connected unclearly. For example, “Additionaley individuals leave a nuclear families so they have no more days” does not clearly show how the point relates to holiday choices. Some transitions are also mechanical, and the conclusion largely repeats the introduction. Organise each body paragraph around one clear reason, then explain it and give a relevant example; use referencing and linking phrases to make those relationships explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “financial condition,” “historical places,” “culture,” and “environment,” and you use some topic-related expressions such as “go on holidays” and “travel abroad.” However, spelling errors are frequent, including “strongley,” “statment,” “accosiated,” and “envornment,” and several word choices or combinations are unclear, such as “leave a nuclear families” and “take final decision.” These problems make it harder for the reader to understand some ideas and show limited control of vocabulary. Build accuracy with common travel and finance collocations, and check spelling carefully. Prefer clear, natural phrases over attempting unfamiliar expressions when you are unsure of their form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response uses basic structures to express a position and give reasons. However, sentence control is inconsistent, with frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction. For example, “Every one need to take rest” needs a plural subject with a matching verb, while “people try to travel own country” is missing grammatical words needed to complete the phrase. Punctuation and spacing also make some sentence boundaries unclear, as in “life .Every one” and “abroad .individuals.” These errors sometimes obscure the intended meaning. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using controlled clauses and check subject–verb agreement and articles.

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