Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The question of whether more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country or explore different country is a highly debtable argument. I personally believe people in the future will travel abroad for an holiday.
On the one hand, people argue that we need to first explore our own country. It is a mere pleasure and convenient to visit our country. Also, its beneficial for the overall development of the country's economy.
On the other hand, from my prespective it is always easy to visit our country at any point of time during our life as it does not require to obtain visa. When we are young and energtic it is always good to travel foreign destinations. Health which we will have at our mid age helps us to explore the places without much of strain. Travelling requires our energy and more of our finance. For example, obtaining visa from the country required more time and patience.
When we are empolyed and does not have much of health concerns thats is the proper time for everyone to travel abroad. For example, when a couple have smaller kids its easy to manage our trips. Travelling with younger kids is always flexible and easy to follow the itinerary.
Finally, I strongly believe travelling our own country can be done at any point of our life time especially during our old age it is better to explore in a relax manner rather than chasing and applying for visa. Ultimaltely, age plays a major role when planning for travel. So i personally believe at young age we need to travel abroad. Later, at old age we can travel our own country in a leisure manner.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
Your position is clear: you believe people should travel abroad when young and explore their own country later in life. You also acknowledge the opposing view that domestic holidays are convenient and support the national economy, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the argument is only partly developed. The points about energy, age and visas are repeated, while the claim that travelling with younger children is “flexible and easy” is not explained and seems to conflict with the earlier emphasis on travelling abroad while young. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation or a specific example, and make the comparison between domestic and overseas holidays more consistent throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two contrasting body sections and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand” and “Finally” help signal the stages of your argument. However, progression within the body paragraphs is not always clear: the discussion moves from age and energy to visas, then to employment and young children without showing how these points connect. Some linking is also repetitive, and the conclusion largely restates the same age-based idea rather than drawing the reasons together. Group related points into a clearer sequence and use linking expressions to show cause, contrast or example, rather than relying mainly on paragraph-opening signposts.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate your main ideas, including “foreign destinations,” “obtain visa,” “itinerary” and “economy.” There are also attempts to use more specific expressions about travel and life stages. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make the writing less natural, such as “a highly debtable argument,” “at any point of time” and “in a relax manner.” Spelling errors including “prespective,” “empolyed” and “Ultimaltely” are noticeable. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common travel collocations, such as “apply for a visa” and “travel overseas.” This will make your ideas clearer and more fluent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including conditional and time clauses such as “When we are young…” and “When we are employed…”. These attempts help express comparisons across different stages of life, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow. For example, “When we are employed and does not have much of health concerns” has a subject–verb agreement problem and an unclear clause structure; “a couple have smaller kids” also has agreement and article errors. Articles and sentence boundaries need attention as well. Practise building accurate complex sentences with one clear main clause, and check agreement, articles and punctuation before submitting.
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