Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is expected that in the coming years, a larger number of people will prefer to spend their holodays inside their own country rather than going to a foreign country. This trend is already growing because of high travel costs and visa problems.

Firstly, travelling inside one's own country is much cheaper than travelling abroad. For a foreign trip, people have to pay for an expensive air ticket, visa fee, and hotel in dollers. On the other hand, a local holiday is affordable. For example, in Pakistan, a family can visit Murree, Hunza or Swat in less money and enjoy beautiful places. Therefore, most families will prefer a local holidays to save money. For example, my family visited

Hunza last year and we spent only half the money we would have spent on a trip to Dubai.

Secondly, travelling in one's own country is more easy and comfortable

People do not need a passport, visa or a long flight. They can travel by car or bus in a fes hours. They also know the language, food and culture, so

they do not face any problem. Moreover, local tourism is also good for the environment because short travel produces less pollution. It aslo creates jobs for local people. In addition, people feel more safe and relaxed in their own country because they know the rules and places.

In conculsion, I strongly believe that in the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country because it is cheaper, easier and better for the country. Although foreign travel is interesting, local holidays will become more popular.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

Your response addresses the question directly and maintains a clear agreement with the prediction, especially in the introduction and conclusion. You give relevant reasons—cost, convenience, familiarity, environmental effects and local employment—and support the cost point with examples from Pakistan and your family’s visit to Hunza. This makes the position clear and the main ideas relevant. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained: for instance, the claims that domestic tourism is better for the environment and makes people feel safer would benefit from a specific explanation or example. The discussion also generalises that “most families” will choose local holidays without showing why this applies broadly. More balanced development of each reason would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting reasons, and a conclusion that restates your view. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the argument. The examples are generally placed near the points they support. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical because several ideas are added through a chain of linking expressions rather than being connected through explanation. The second body paragraph moves quickly from convenience to familiarity, environmental benefits, jobs and safety, so its progression is less focused. The two examples about saving money also repeat the same point. Group related ideas and explain their connection, and ensure each paragraph develops a smaller number of points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “travel costs,” “visa fee,” “local tourism,” “pollution” and “creates jobs.” The contrast between holidays at home and trips abroad is also expressed clearly. However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word choices are noticeable, including “holodays,” “dollers,” “fes,” “aslo” and “conculsion.” Some phrases are awkward, such as “in less money,” “more easy” and “feel more safe.” These slips do not prevent the reader from understanding your argument, but they limit precision and naturalness. Build accuracy with common collocations for travel and comparison, and proofread spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mixture of simple sentences and some longer structures, including the contrast in “Although foreign travel is interesting, local holidays will become more popular.” Most of the argument remains understandable, and the basic sentence patterns are generally clear. Some grammatical errors occur, however. “A local holidays” has incorrect article and number agreement, while “travelling … is more easy and comfortable” uses an incorrect comparative form. The sentence beginning “Secondly” lacks a full stop before it, and the following ideas are separated inconsistently across lines. There is also limited variety in how supporting ideas are joined. Practise accurate comparatives, articles and plural forms, and use punctuation to mark complete sentences; then vary sentence structures while keeping them controlled.

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