Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Nowadays, different people have different choice some like to travel their own country and some travel foreign country for the holiday. I totally disagree with this statement and I will give reasons and relevant example upcoming passage.
More and more people travel for overseas for their holiday some visit famous country like USA, United Kingdom, Canada and many more other countries. The reason behind this people want to learn more about the culture of different kind of country. The second reason is some people want some refreshment in their life so they travel abroad instead of their country because they were travel their own country each and every part. For instance, one of my friend who has hobby to travel one place to another place so he travel many place in our country and now he is travelling overseas country like Dubai, Baku and many other country to see the architecture of the budling. Their many other places like CN tower in Canada so people can watch whole Toronto city from one place.
Some people might travel their own country due to budget restriction. People who came from the middle class they cannot afford abroad trip budget so they might compromise their dreams due to their budget. But they travel different place of their country for their enjoyment. For example, my uncle who earn only 20k per month he want to spend their quality of time with their family and planning for small trip to travel near by area.
To conclude, I am totally agree with this statement in future more people will choose to go for vacation abroad to learn new things and it will good for country as well as the person who learn this skill.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt, but the position is inconsistent. While the introduction states a disagreement with the idea that people will stay in their own country, the conclusion is confusing, stating 'I am totally agree with this statement'. This contradiction makes the overall position unclear. The ideas are relevant, such as cultural learning and budget constraints, but they are not fully developed. The arguments lack depth, and the examples provided, such as the uncle earning 20k, are somewhat anecdotal and do not strongly support the broader argument about future global travel trends. To improve, ensure your position is consistent throughout and provide more analytical support for your points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'The second reason is some people want some refreshment' lacks a proper transition, and the connection between sentences is sometimes abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'their own country each and every part'. While there is a logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the confusion in the conclusion hinder the flow of ideas. Improving the use of transition signals would help the essay read more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'travel their own country' (should be 'travel within their own country') and 'architecture of the budling' (spelling error). The repetition of basic words like 'travel' and 'country' limits the lexical variety. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise collocations and a wider range of vocabulary related to tourism and economics, while ensuring that words are used in their correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('my friend who has hobby'), missing prepositions ('travel overseas'), and incorrect verb tenses ('he travel many place'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb forms, and proofreading for small grammatical slips would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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