Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In today's world of modernizations, many individuals would prefer to visit different tourist places in their own country in upcoming time rather then exploring the other places present world wide. I partialy agree with this statement. In further paragraphs my agreement and its disagreement will be discussed along with suitable conclusion.

Supporting my agreement to this statement, it is true that due to increasing rate of inflamation most of people who belongs to meadium family would avoid visiting foriegn countries in holidays. On the other side, traveling in India is quite cheap through public or private transport. So it might be the one reason people will avoid other countries in future. In addition, with the development of new infrastructure in country like road and railwaylines, it become easier to travel to different places in India. For example development of railway lines from Kanyakumari to Kashmir it is now feasible to many people to spend their vacation in their own country. Moreover it helps them to intract with diffrent people from other culture and language. As per the resart India has highest number of tourist places to visit then any other country.

Explaining other points against this statement the major reason is with the development of new technology it has been now easy to get tourist visa of any country which one would like to visit. As a result of it younger generation would courage more to visit travel foriegn countries. For example, countries like Dubai, Qatar and many other develop a E-Visa of 5weeks to attract tourist from all around the world which

encourages people to visit new destination. Furthermore some countries provides amazing experience of development, weather or environment it becomes other reason for people like to explore other countries like USA, Swizerland, Itlay and others. It also helps to gain knowledge about other country during a trip.

In conclusion, traveling to other countries in holidays and visiting owns countries tourist places have their own own benefits. It depends on individual where they would like to visit during the vacation period. I think aforementioned points strongly support my viewpoint.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both sides of the argument, though the position is somewhat underdeveloped. You clearly state you 'partially agree,' but the development of ideas lacks depth. For instance, while you mention inflation and infrastructure as reasons for domestic travel, these points could be expanded with more specific analysis rather than just listing them. The conclusion is a bit generic and does not fully synthesize the arguments presented. To improve, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported idea that directly relates to the future trend mentioned in the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices like 'In addition,' 'Moreover,' and 'In conclusion,' but these are sometimes used mechanically. There are also issues with referencing; for example, the phrase 'In further paragraphs my agreement and its disagreement will be discussed' is slightly unnatural. The flow between sentences is generally clear, but the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother to better highlight the contrast between domestic and international travel.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, but there are frequent spelling errors such as 'inflamation' (inflation), 'meadium' (medium), 'foriegn' (foreign), 'intract' (interact), 'resart' (research), and 'Swizerland' (Switzerland). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'infrastructure' and 'destination,' the word choice is sometimes imprecise, such as 'courage more to visit' instead of 'be encouraged to visit.' Focusing on accurate spelling and more precise collocations will help raise your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('most of people who belongs to'), article usage ('in country like road'), and awkward phrasing ('it become easier'). Some sentences are incomplete or run-on, such as the sentence ending in 'which' at the end of the third paragraph. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to affect the overall fluency of the writing. You should focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy.

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