Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Individuals are eagerly waiting for their holidays those are working and studying so that they can enjoy their life. At present people prefer to go on international trips which are becoming increasingly popular among them, but there are some prediction for future that more commuters will follow the trend to stay in their home country for travelling rather than going abroad. I partially agree with this notion and will discuss my argument in the subsequent paragraphs.

In the favour of people’s choice to commuting in their own nation for spend holidays will happen due to availability of resources and security purposes. To expound, as every country has been developing continuously there will be enough opportunities for the people to arrange their outings without worrying about accommodation and foodstuffs they normally required while they are on trip. It can be seen many restaurants which are serving different world tastes meals and also five star hotels facilities present at every corner in many countries that will fosters a sense among traveler to stay in their home country for future planning.Additionally, people will be more conscious about their safety as they already knowns about the emergency contact in their nation they will easily dial a number of nearest emergency if they can face some kind of unusual situations.

On the flip side, travelling out of the country would still be preferable in the future by holiday makers for acquiring varied experiences and improving their status.Making plan to go on world tour will not only happen since their interest to enjoy other country’ s weather but also they would like to improve insights about distinct cultures and traditions which after leading them to becomes extraordinary person with lot of knowledge. Additionally, they will present their level of wealth in front of their society will automatically increase their passion to contributing for abroad trips.

In conclusion, although both options will be preferred by people in case entertaining themselves for going out but I think staying at home country would be more beneficial for travelling to enjoy their moments without any uncertainty.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt and maintains a clear position throughout. You have provided relevant reasons for both sides of the argument, such as the convenience of domestic travel and the cultural benefits of international trips. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed; for instance, the point about 'improving status' by travelling abroad is mentioned but not fully explored in terms of its social implications. To reach a higher band, ensure that each supporting point is fully explained with more specific examples or deeper analysis. Overall, the response is well-structured and directly answers the question asked.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. You use cohesive devices such as 'In the favour of', 'Additionally', and 'On the flip side' to guide the reader through your argument. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical or awkward, such as 'In the favour of people’s choice to commuting'. Furthermore, the referencing is occasionally unclear, and some sentences feel disjointed. Improving the flow between sentences by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'accommodation', 'unusual situations', and 'distinct cultures'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'commuters' (when you mean 'travellers'), 'world tastes meals', and 'after leading them to becomes'. These errors occasionally make the text feel unnatural. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary. While your meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision in word choice prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is a positive step. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('they already knowns', 'that will fosters'), incorrect verb forms ('for spend holidays', 'to contributing'), and missing articles. While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they are persistent and occur in both simple and complex sentences. To improve, pay closer attention to basic grammar rules, particularly verb tenses and prepositional phrases, and proofread your work to catch these common slips.

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