Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this contemporary era , people love to travel on different place during their vocations . In the upcomping time , majority of people will love to travel in their own region while holidays instead of exploring another countries attractive places. I am completely disagree with given notion because of some reasons which are mention in furthcoming paaragraphs .

To commence with , in futher numerous people love travel outside country becase people explore different countries culture and food . To more elaborete it , when people will go in froeign countries for travelling they can take experience how survive their life in very cold and hot places such as Yukon and South Africa respectively as well as to take experience of their cutures, tradition attries and foods . Plenty of individuals has a keen interest to know about their ethical values and what types of rules ad regulations are folled by local dwellers. For instance , a headline BBC ( British broadcasting Corporation ) revealed that 90% had a interest to travel differnet place in all over the world to instance their knowledge about different regions traditional values and ethnical foods .

Moreover , in the upcoming time people will give more preference to travel in another counties to post many incredible photos and vedios on social media accounts such as instagram and snapchat to make their account more authentic and they will try to attract more followers as well as likes by posting different places photos . For exmaple , Travel department was conducted a survey in 2025 in which they observed in future mass number of people will visit in Canada to see tourist attraction place such as Banff and Canada Place to post blogs on their You Tube channels to increase the reach of thewir travelling channels .

In Conclusion, in the future enormous number of people will travel in abroad during their vocation to explore different nations foods and to explore more eye cataching place in all over world to take new experience of life as well as to enhance their knowledge.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position against the idea that domestic tourism will dominate. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive and relies on superficial arguments, such as the desire to post on social media. While the response covers the requirements, the supporting examples—such as the reference to a 'BBC headline' and a '2025 survey'—are vague and lack genuine analytical depth. To reach a higher band, you should focus on more substantive arguments, such as the economic benefits of international travel or the cultural exchange that domestic tourism cannot fully replicate, rather than focusing on social media trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression from the introduction to the conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices like 'To commence with', 'Moreover', and 'In conclusion' to signal transitions. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical, and the flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing. Referencing is generally clear, but the internal structure of paragraphs could be improved by ensuring that each supporting point is more tightly linked to the main argument rather than just listing examples.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary range is adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'upcomping', 'froeign', 'cutures', 'attries', 'folled', 'vedios', 'exmaple', 'cataching') and some awkward collocations (e.g., 'take experience how survive', 'instance their knowledge'). While the meaning is generally clear, these errors are persistent and distract the reader. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic vocabulary and practice using words in their correct contextual collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('Plenty of individuals has', 'Travel department was conducted'), article usage, and preposition errors ('travel in another counties', 'travel in abroad'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. You should focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that prepositions are used correctly with verbs like 'travel' and 'visit'.

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