Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The people are going to spend their holidays in their own country rather than travelling to abroad. I am more agree to this statement.

First of all, people are getting more information about places to explore in their own country through social media. There are places which looks similar like abroad and are much cheaper and affordable. So, people are getting more awareness about hidden gems. Although, it saves their time and money. Secondly, folks are getting aware about economy importance regarding their country. When they travel to another country and spend money over there. So, they are contributing economically to them. Now people thinks to spend money in their country and can contribute economically as well.

On other side, some people still like to travel to abroad in their holidays. They like to spend time in new places. They like foreign culture and tradition, their food, their lifestyle. In this way they can become a part of that environment. Moreover, people like to post on social media of viral places and wanted to gather attention with more likes. Infact, they do earning through it. Therefore, they can gather new life experience. For example, Dubai is the safest country because of its rules and regulations. The Gold is very cheap over there and popular. Also, sheikh lives there which are famous for their richness. People like to visit this country for these reasons.

At last, it can be concluded, that future generation may like to spend their holidays in their own country or different country. It depends on their personal choice. As people are getting more aware about contributions regarding their home country, so they will prefer more to be in their country only rather than spending vacations in abroad.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed the prompt and provided a clear position. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For example, your point about 'economy importance' is a strong argument, but it lacks specific explanation or a concrete example to fully illustrate how domestic tourism impacts a national economy. Similarly, the counter-argument regarding international travel is a bit disjointed, particularly the reference to 'sheikhs' and 'gold' in Dubai, which feels like a list of features rather than a cohesive argument about why people choose to travel abroad. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on one clear main idea supported by a detailed explanation or a relevant, well-integrated example.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices like 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'On other side' to signal transitions. However, some of these are used incorrectly or mechanically. For instance, 'On other side' should be 'On the other hand', and the transition 'Infact' is used inappropriately to introduce a new point about social media. Additionally, some sentences are fragmented, such as 'Although, it saves their time and money', which lacks a main clause. Improving the variety and accuracy of your linking words will help your ideas flow more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your meaning, but there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation. For example, you use 'travelling to abroad' (should be 'travelling abroad'), 'economy importance' (should be 'economic importance'), and 'contributing economically to them' (should be 'contributing to their economies'). You also use 'I am more agree', which is grammatically incorrect; 'I am more inclined to agree' or 'I largely agree' would be more natural. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'hidden gems' and 'environment', the overall precision is inconsistent, which occasionally hinders the clarity of your message.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

Your writing shows a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('people thinks'), incorrect preposition usage ('spend money over there'), and article errors ('The Gold is very cheap'). Furthermore, many sentences are punctuated incorrectly, such as the sentence fragment starting with 'Although'. While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding your main points, they are frequent enough to impact the overall fluency of the essay. Focusing on basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your score.

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